for Clean5/11/2007 c1 belz
hi,
that is wow, wow wow wow. It's very strong. I don't think it needed the word fucking as much as you used it, it may be slightly more powerful if you use less harsh lanuage at the start and then build up.
Awesome story.
hi,
that is wow, wow wow wow. It's very strong. I don't think it needed the word fucking as much as you used it, it may be slightly more powerful if you use less harsh lanuage at the start and then build up.
Awesome story.
5/11/2007 c1 
3dancer-me
Short but powerful, but somehow, I feel like I know the whole story. That's some skill. A depressing tale though! But the ones that pull on your heartstrings are always the best. Even with the language, it suits the content fairly well, and makes the girls revelations even strong. Everything is well placed. Nice job :)
3dancer-meShort but powerful, but somehow, I feel like I know the whole story. That's some skill. A depressing tale though! But the ones that pull on your heartstrings are always the best. Even with the language, it suits the content fairly well, and makes the girls revelations even strong. Everything is well placed. Nice job :)