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6/9/2007 c1 174a silenced revolution
True - Good haiku.
5/20/2007 c1 169MallowsWins
The final line saved this from being unoriginal. The first and second lines, while both sounded good, didn't flow into each other vey well. I like that you bolded the word sick (whereas I normally dislike that kinda thing in haiku) because it highlighted the strongest emotion in the poem. Good haiku, I enjoyed it.
5/16/2007 c1 hey maria
"Helplessly silent"

That's such a perfect way to describe jealousy.
5/16/2007 c1 Disturbed Insomniac
nice haiku
5/16/2007 c1 1Headache
m.

i like this.

short, sweet, to the point. The last line=really hits home.

i can totally relate.

=]

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