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3/19/2008 c1 59Tranquil Thorns
I enjoyed this, though this is a little creepy in a way. Still, I like the twist of things.

One sentence that confused me was 'You might, you will go on trying to pretend that nothing ever happened.' I didn't understand the 'you might' at the beginning. Was it supposed to connect to the previous sentence and I missed something? Or is the 'will' supposed to be emphasized?

Nevertheless, I thought this was nicely written.
5/17/2007 c1 9Otseis Ragnarok
I think that that was good. One improvement, however would be an increased sense of superiority from God's perspective. A nice mention of "Hoew cruel I can be, yet you worship at my feet regardless."(feel free to use that quote). Add- in something about humans "groveling at the feet of their creator."(see last parenthesis). In all, I'd love to know what kind of video this was made for, and I'd also like to see your re-write when you get arou8nd to fixing this(which isn't really necessary unless you take my suggestions into consideration). Until next time, I bid you adieu.

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