for Drool6/12/2007 c1 
11xDancingintheRainx
XD I saw the title, and just had to read this. After I finished reading, I did one of those smilecringe things where you aren't sure if something's incredibly funny, or disgusting, or both. I think in this case, it might be both. You've written this perfectly and your word choice was excellent. Great work and thanks for the review!
11xDancingintheRainxXD I saw the title, and just had to read this. After I finished reading, I did one of those smilecringe things where you aren't sure if something's incredibly funny, or disgusting, or both. I think in this case, it might be both. You've written this perfectly and your word choice was excellent. Great work and thanks for the review!
5/19/2007 c1 6McQuinn
HA! I like this. Your choice of words are perfect, first of all. You use "immersed" which reminds me of liquid, and you ARE writing about a guy that's drooling. ("Trickling" is another one of those words.) So those were nice touches.
"Drool" might not be the best title for this haiku, as you're not exactly describing the drool itself, but someone in the act of drooling (and a rather funny, almost pathetic one).
I have a slight question, though. Why no capitalization? Is it supposed to mean something, or are you going all "e.e. cummings" on fictionpress? :p
Nice work.
-McQuinn
6McQuinnHA! I like this. Your choice of words are perfect, first of all. You use "immersed" which reminds me of liquid, and you ARE writing about a guy that's drooling. ("Trickling" is another one of those words.) So those were nice touches.
"Drool" might not be the best title for this haiku, as you're not exactly describing the drool itself, but someone in the act of drooling (and a rather funny, almost pathetic one).
I have a slight question, though. Why no capitalization? Is it supposed to mean something, or are you going all "e.e. cummings" on fictionpress? :p
Nice work.
-McQuinn
5/17/2007 c1 60dollface and her cancer
i'm not usually a fan of haiku. but i can make an exception to smile at this one. cute.
60dollface and her canceri'm not usually a fan of haiku. but i can make an exception to smile at this one. cute.