5/22/2007 c3 3I Quoth Nevermore
Great job. I love all the Latin in this (I took Latin last year) and it's great. I was just a little confused...I thought Blake wanted Lux to be Oriel, so why do the women with the bird masks not like her and think she's the enemy?

It was an absolutely brilliant description when you said her red train followed her like a stream of blood. Was that some foreshadowing? Hmm...Keep it up.

This is my guess at what's going on (it's probably totally wrong):

The flashback/dream was how Oriel (Desdamona?) died and she's sort of partially reincarnated in Lux's body, which is a mixture of the good and evil side of life.

Okay, that's probably totally off, but it was fun to guess.

Please update so I know where Blake is taking her!

Sorry, I talk a lot...

5/21/2007 c3 ham3
Thanks for updating! And thanks so much for not making Blake a vampire!

Hehe, I’m becoming obsessed with your story. It’s so romantic and captivating!

5/21/2007 c2 3I Quoth Nevermore
This is great. I'm just going to go on a rant here about what I like about your style/writing:

The way you described Dominic's breath like candy was definately a "light" feature. I wonder what Blake's breath will smell like?

And how Blake said that Lux's lips probably tasted like heaven could be taken in the literal sense (or as literal as it can get) because of the whole light and dark situation.

The cold as death bit was brilliant.

What does the word Oriel translate to? (I"m too lazy to look it up.) So, it Lux a mix between good and evil (Lux and Oriel)? That's interesting.

You know what was brilliant? Like really awesome? You wrote Blake's character so I don't hate him. It's expected that the evil person wouldn't be liked, but you make the readers feel sympathetic towards him because he really wants Lux to be Oriel. Aw!

Okay, rant over. Now, please update!

5/20/2007 c2 ham3
Wow. How cool and intriguing! Hope you write more soon!

5/19/2007 c1 12Dezi E
Intriguing... I like it.

Way to leave me hanging there... .