for Sandra's Stationery Set10/12/2007 c1 
62Oracle of Destiny
Hehe, this was rather good! God, the boss seemed rather bossy with him shouting all the time and teasing his employees with enjoying an ice cream while the weather was hot and sticky. I hate people like that - I just wish that they should be sent to another planet. I think that will be a wise decision not to make the world a better place too :)
I liked how the stationary got different personalities and they had their own unique voice. Despite it being weird imagining pens and pencils speaking it really fits in well with the story lol.
Personally I think we all get our inpiration from a lot of various things in life - including the world. Toy Story is one of my favourite films although I haven't seen it for a long, long time. But I liked the message that is portrayed in this story. Keep up with the good work and carry on writing!
62Oracle of DestinyHehe, this was rather good! God, the boss seemed rather bossy with him shouting all the time and teasing his employees with enjoying an ice cream while the weather was hot and sticky. I hate people like that - I just wish that they should be sent to another planet. I think that will be a wise decision not to make the world a better place too :)
I liked how the stationary got different personalities and they had their own unique voice. Despite it being weird imagining pens and pencils speaking it really fits in well with the story lol.
Personally I think we all get our inpiration from a lot of various things in life - including the world. Toy Story is one of my favourite films although I haven't seen it for a long, long time. But I liked the message that is portrayed in this story. Keep up with the good work and carry on writing!
8/12/2007 c1 eMoMuFfIn
LOL
But a few points - her draw dropped open. Her JAW?
And also...I just wonder why her twins would be so attached to SALLY'S stationery. Oh yeah, what's ROBERT? And also...did you name the story SANDRA'S stationery set on purpose?
But otherwise, it was funny. It was good for a laugh! Funnyy...
LAPTOPS should not be thrown away, no matter how uncheap somebody is.
LOL
But a few points - her draw dropped open. Her JAW?
And also...I just wonder why her twins would be so attached to SALLY'S stationery. Oh yeah, what's ROBERT? And also...did you name the story SANDRA'S stationery set on purpose?
But otherwise, it was funny. It was good for a laugh! Funnyy...
LAPTOPS should not be thrown away, no matter how uncheap somebody is.
6/21/2007 c1 slatedtobedeleted
Haha, this is a clever story! Told in the point of view of a laptop...very creative. The laptop and the stationary set were all very enjoyable characters.
However, Sally's character herself is rather perfect, too perfect if you ask me. She virtually inhuman, too smart, too sweet, too victimized. Plus, she's the poorest person in her entire town, but she has a laptop? Major plot hole right there, if you ask me.
There was a smattering of typos throughout the story, but none that really detract from the story as a whole. I enjoyed your somewhat sarcastic tone (i.e. "a paper with the most original name, The Village Times"), it was rather amusing.
On the whole, good job! It's a nice short story.
Haha, this is a clever story! Told in the point of view of a laptop...very creative. The laptop and the stationary set were all very enjoyable characters.
However, Sally's character herself is rather perfect, too perfect if you ask me. She virtually inhuman, too smart, too sweet, too victimized. Plus, she's the poorest person in her entire town, but she has a laptop? Major plot hole right there, if you ask me.
There was a smattering of typos throughout the story, but none that really detract from the story as a whole. I enjoyed your somewhat sarcastic tone (i.e. "a paper with the most original name, The Village Times"), it was rather amusing.
On the whole, good job! It's a nice short story.