for Guillotine6/28/2007 c1 
332smile for the sunshine
Wow; although well written, it's a rather troubling topic...Blade to a head...Shudders...I think the language that you used did a good job to explain the time period and the title helped confirm what the poem spoke of. Again short, but great. I liked the rhyming that you used throughout the piece as well. That added to the flow. At times it felt rather repetitive but all in all excellent. (as the other that I had read)
332smile for the sunshineWow; although well written, it's a rather troubling topic...Blade to a head...Shudders...I think the language that you used did a good job to explain the time period and the title helped confirm what the poem spoke of. Again short, but great. I liked the rhyming that you used throughout the piece as well. That added to the flow. At times it felt rather repetitive but all in all excellent. (as the other that I had read)
6/27/2007 c1 45Lyrena
This one disturbed me significantly less. I can read gore and death, but monsters and babies? Guess I can't stomach that as well.
Again, I love the old world feel to this. Like stepping back in time. Some of the morrows have me a little hanged up, as far as flow.
I liked the parallel betwen Forgive me darling for I have sinned, and Catholic confessionals.
45LyrenaThis one disturbed me significantly less. I can read gore and death, but monsters and babies? Guess I can't stomach that as well.
Again, I love the old world feel to this. Like stepping back in time. Some of the morrows have me a little hanged up, as far as flow.
I liked the parallel betwen Forgive me darling for I have sinned, and Catholic confessionals.
5/28/2007 c1 43Dante's Disciple
Good work, very old style in its telling which I like. The repetition of the morrow was done well to, only question is why is it rated M? Nothing violent really happens, and more people would read it if you rated it T. Just a thought. Anyway great poem and great work :)
43Dante's DiscipleGood work, very old style in its telling which I like. The repetition of the morrow was done well to, only question is why is it rated M? Nothing violent really happens, and more people would read it if you rated it T. Just a thought. Anyway great poem and great work :)