for O' Seraph6/28/2007 c1 
332smile for the sunshine
That was really good...Really sad though. It sounded rather professional. I thought that was interesting...how you wrote in the same way as famous poets (it seems like something in the eyes of Edgar Allan Poe...) I think it's rather cool that you seem to do that in this and your other pieces...Like your pieces are wonderful...but always appear to be in a different perspective. The figurative language is always great...But I feel like I'm not seeing your voice. You take on other voices a lot...Maybe that is your voice though. Maybe you camoflague into the perspective of the piece that you want to write. I don't know. It seems very well thought out. It's definitely well written. But...That's the only thing I am not so sure about. If it's really your voice between the lines. I don't know. That's just what I thought. Please take no offense to it. If so, just reply. Explain maybe. But trust me, your work is incredible. Truly.
332smile for the sunshineThat was really good...Really sad though. It sounded rather professional. I thought that was interesting...how you wrote in the same way as famous poets (it seems like something in the eyes of Edgar Allan Poe...) I think it's rather cool that you seem to do that in this and your other pieces...Like your pieces are wonderful...but always appear to be in a different perspective. The figurative language is always great...But I feel like I'm not seeing your voice. You take on other voices a lot...Maybe that is your voice though. Maybe you camoflague into the perspective of the piece that you want to write. I don't know. It seems very well thought out. It's definitely well written. But...That's the only thing I am not so sure about. If it's really your voice between the lines. I don't know. That's just what I thought. Please take no offense to it. If so, just reply. Explain maybe. But trust me, your work is incredible. Truly.