for By The Moon12/28/2007 c13 
4jammi
well, in stories I find that people tend to make wolves the bad guy or crazy or something, makes no sense to me lol.
Poor Rayne, always getting locked up when for the majority of her life she's been running free. One thing though, she was turned when she was twelve right? She speaks her age though, which I think is extremely contradictory since there was no way for her vocabulary to expand, even if she was a precocious child it doesn't really make sense. Especially if she gave herself over to the wolf side.
4jammiwell, in stories I find that people tend to make wolves the bad guy or crazy or something, makes no sense to me lol.
Poor Rayne, always getting locked up when for the majority of her life she's been running free. One thing though, she was turned when she was twelve right? She speaks her age though, which I think is extremely contradictory since there was no way for her vocabulary to expand, even if she was a precocious child it doesn't really make sense. Especially if she gave herself over to the wolf side.
12/28/2007 c13 7Ashenwisp
I love this series! You are an amazing authoress! Please update more often, as you've gotten me hooked! Thank you for writing!:D
7AshenwispI love this series! You are an amazing authoress! Please update more often, as you've gotten me hooked! Thank you for writing!:D
12/28/2007 c13 1Fleeting Moment
I love this story! WHy did the pups have to do that I was really starting to like them? UPDATE! THIS IS AWSOME.
1Fleeting MomentI love this story! WHy did the pups have to do that I was really starting to like them? UPDATE! THIS IS AWSOME.
12/28/2007 c13 Lyra Waterflame
Ouch! At least before it was an honest cage. Poor Rayne!
Please write more soon! please?
Ouch! At least before it was an honest cage. Poor Rayne!
Please write more soon! please?
12/28/2007 c13 ItalianQT
Kedyn needs to spend more time with her so she can warm up to him! Update soon! :-)
Kedyn needs to spend more time with her so she can warm up to him! Update soon! :-)
12/28/2007 c12 4jammi
Am I the only person cheering for her to hook up with Rurac? I mean, I know that would lead to a helluva lot of angst for him and drama for her but I can not stand Kedyn, lol. Normally I'm all for the strong alpha male who knows what he wants blah blah blah, but he's looking like a real arrogant asshole and even if he's confused it's not even remotely attractive to me. While Rayne on the other hand is uber kickass and I love the fact that you made it so she isn't as susceptible to the bond as he is. It makes it that much easier to respect her, *especially* the fact that her actions make sense. I have characters who fly into rages but I don't have that skill you have to make it clear to the reader *why* she's flying into a rage and make the preson feel angry on her behalf. Of course, in my case that's biting you on the ass because I don't like her soulmate but oh well.
And I love the fact she got pissed over that human bitch comment, lol, his high and mighty 'I'm amazing 'cause I'm pure' attitude is annoying and for some reason makes me think of Hitler. Also, wot for mentioning Canada AND for making wolves, real wolves, not insane. And I like the fact that real wolves can kill werewolves.
I know you haven't updated in a while but I really enjoyed what I've read so far although you have a tendency to leave out words for some of the sentences and grammar is a bit off. But nothing a Beta or editing won't fix in the long run.
4jammiAm I the only person cheering for her to hook up with Rurac? I mean, I know that would lead to a helluva lot of angst for him and drama for her but I can not stand Kedyn, lol. Normally I'm all for the strong alpha male who knows what he wants blah blah blah, but he's looking like a real arrogant asshole and even if he's confused it's not even remotely attractive to me. While Rayne on the other hand is uber kickass and I love the fact that you made it so she isn't as susceptible to the bond as he is. It makes it that much easier to respect her, *especially* the fact that her actions make sense. I have characters who fly into rages but I don't have that skill you have to make it clear to the reader *why* she's flying into a rage and make the preson feel angry on her behalf. Of course, in my case that's biting you on the ass because I don't like her soulmate but oh well.
And I love the fact she got pissed over that human bitch comment, lol, his high and mighty 'I'm amazing 'cause I'm pure' attitude is annoying and for some reason makes me think of Hitler. Also, wot for mentioning Canada AND for making wolves, real wolves, not insane. And I like the fact that real wolves can kill werewolves.
I know you haven't updated in a while but I really enjoyed what I've read so far although you have a tendency to leave out words for some of the sentences and grammar is a bit off. But nothing a Beta or editing won't fix in the long run.
12/11/2007 c12 ItalianQT
Interesting story so far! I hope Kedyn tells Rayne about mates soon so everything will make sense to Rayne! Update soon! :-)
Interesting story so far! I hope Kedyn tells Rayne about mates soon so everything will make sense to Rayne! Update soon! :-)
10/13/2007 c1 3Phantom'sLuv
You've gotta update! Don't leave us hanging. I really want things to get all romantic :) its the best part. hehe
~Phantom'sLuv
3Phantom'sLuvYou've gotta update! Don't leave us hanging. I really want things to get all romantic :) its the best part. hehe
~Phantom'sLuv
9/3/2007 c12 Essie
Hi! JUst started reading.
Such an intricate fantasy. I love your story telling - especially the short tutorial on How Werewolves Began 101. The intro was superb in that I actually thought the baddie was going to be the hero of the story. Threw me off a bit. Something about always going for the underdog. I guess you managed to swerve away from cliche there.
I've been so bummed lately that a lot of stories these days contain some of the flattest characters and no plot. So your story is great!Your characters actually have dimension and depth! Rurac - his history, he actually has an interesting past and reasons for the way he acts. He is my favourite (not as a love interest for Rayne of course) but don't you think there is just something about the strong silent type? Also would like to know more about what happened to him!
And the relationship between Rayne and the pups. Give & take -Live and learn alpha male. Hahahahah
I also like the mature tones contained in your writing which really contrasts with your blasting off in the author notes. Comedy relief for me. It's funny (though maybe not for you). Write more k!
Hi! JUst started reading.
Such an intricate fantasy. I love your story telling - especially the short tutorial on How Werewolves Began 101. The intro was superb in that I actually thought the baddie was going to be the hero of the story. Threw me off a bit. Something about always going for the underdog. I guess you managed to swerve away from cliche there.
I've been so bummed lately that a lot of stories these days contain some of the flattest characters and no plot. So your story is great!Your characters actually have dimension and depth! Rurac - his history, he actually has an interesting past and reasons for the way he acts. He is my favourite (not as a love interest for Rayne of course) but don't you think there is just something about the strong silent type? Also would like to know more about what happened to him!
And the relationship between Rayne and the pups. Give & take -Live and learn alpha male. Hahahahah
I also like the mature tones contained in your writing which really contrasts with your blasting off in the author notes. Comedy relief for me. It's funny (though maybe not for you). Write more k!
9/1/2007 c12 5aferdeity
I LOVED this chapter his stubborness amuses me. I feel for him I really do but I think he needs to lighten up just a little bit.
5aferdeityI LOVED this chapter his stubborness amuses me. I feel for him I really do but I think he needs to lighten up just a little bit.
8/15/2007 c12 3Shayby
As you can read on my profile, I'm not used to leaving reviews. I never know what to say or how to say it, but after reading all your author notes, I figured I might get yelled at for just adding you and your story to my favorites. =P So here is my review, short and simple, I love it.
3ShaybyAs you can read on my profile, I'm not used to leaving reviews. I never know what to say or how to say it, but after reading all your author notes, I figured I might get yelled at for just adding you and your story to my favorites. =P So here is my review, short and simple, I love it.
8/13/2007 c12 6ghostlygeorge
you're back!
I loved the chapter! Does this mean Kedyn will be less of a jerk?
6ghostlygeorgeyou're back!
I loved the chapter! Does this mean Kedyn will be less of a jerk?
8/11/2007 c12 1mapusyaw
I tried visiting your homepage but sadly, I don't have a WindowsLive account T_T.
Hmm, this chapter is rather short compared to the last ones, not to mention less detailed.
The grammar has improved and there are less run-on sentences but the word 'then' is still being misused, like in this phrase, "more then willingly granted". It should have been "more than".
I know you're already far with regards to the number of chapters but you might want to tweak the past ones just to make some of the sentences more coherent, in case a new reader comes across this story.
I have a question. If no other female Lykae existed aside from Rayne, that makes Kedyn's mother a human bitch as well, right? XDD. Seems like the king has more problems to come, eh? Serves him right *sniggers*. Update soon!
1mapusyawI tried visiting your homepage but sadly, I don't have a WindowsLive account T_T.
Hmm, this chapter is rather short compared to the last ones, not to mention less detailed.
The grammar has improved and there are less run-on sentences but the word 'then' is still being misused, like in this phrase, "more then willingly granted". It should have been "more than".
I know you're already far with regards to the number of chapters but you might want to tweak the past ones just to make some of the sentences more coherent, in case a new reader comes across this story.
I have a question. If no other female Lykae existed aside from Rayne, that makes Kedyn's mother a human bitch as well, right? XDD. Seems like the king has more problems to come, eh? Serves him right *sniggers*. Update soon!
8/10/2007 c12 CITPPP
ahahaa great roaring bafoon...teehee
lurvly, again.
excitment over your vamp fic. woot.
-adrienne
ahahaa great roaring bafoon...teehee
lurvly, again.
excitment over your vamp fic. woot.
-adrienne