for By The Moon8/9/2007 c12 
1WriteKindOfLove
This was a really great chapter, from the beginning the descriptions were right on point like-There was a promise of secret places few would ever see within those shadows-that line was just so vivid and real. Then it went on to Rayne's morning ritual and the sad story behind that, it culminated in her now having only her name left to call her own. Maybe in the future it'll change to include her Pack and Kedyn (one can only hope). Lastly I thought Kedyn's reaction was extremely surprising, I expected him to chop some heads off or something, it only makes me wonder more about his nature. Also, Rayne's reaction to hearing her mother called a 'human bitch' was realistic and created a lot of empathy as well as a new connection between her and her pack brothers. Oh, and thanks for the shoutout lol. PMS! Can't wait to see what happens next now that she's been officially given her own room and accepted in.
1WriteKindOfLoveThis was a really great chapter, from the beginning the descriptions were right on point like-There was a promise of secret places few would ever see within those shadows-that line was just so vivid and real. Then it went on to Rayne's morning ritual and the sad story behind that, it culminated in her now having only her name left to call her own. Maybe in the future it'll change to include her Pack and Kedyn (one can only hope). Lastly I thought Kedyn's reaction was extremely surprising, I expected him to chop some heads off or something, it only makes me wonder more about his nature. Also, Rayne's reaction to hearing her mother called a 'human bitch' was realistic and created a lot of empathy as well as a new connection between her and her pack brothers. Oh, and thanks for the shoutout lol. PMS! Can't wait to see what happens next now that she's been officially given her own room and accepted in.
8/9/2007 c11 WriteKindOfLove
Interesting, Rayne finally bursts out with all she has been feeling and the effect is tangible, you almost feel yourself like you're releasing something you've been holding onto tightly for so long. It's nice to see how Kedyn and Rayne's relationship might actually progress, as two wild wolves running one pack together, but I have a feeling it'll be a rocky road to that point. Also it was fairly humorous to have Kedyn make a sort of mental note to 'cut his woman off' before she started a full blown rant, I'm pretty sure all husbands, or in this case, mates, feel that way about their significant others. Good job, pms!
Interesting, Rayne finally bursts out with all she has been feeling and the effect is tangible, you almost feel yourself like you're releasing something you've been holding onto tightly for so long. It's nice to see how Kedyn and Rayne's relationship might actually progress, as two wild wolves running one pack together, but I have a feeling it'll be a rocky road to that point. Also it was fairly humorous to have Kedyn make a sort of mental note to 'cut his woman off' before she started a full blown rant, I'm pretty sure all husbands, or in this case, mates, feel that way about their significant others. Good job, pms!
8/9/2007 c10 WriteKindOfLove
Gah! Ajal and Dacado are morons! I feel like hitting them over the head with something! It's going to go terribly wrong, all of Kedyns thoughts about what could happen were enough to foreshadow that this ill fated plan will not go well, at least, I don't think. I like the way you turned Ajal and Dacado into real 'brothers' to Rayne but yet still having that undercurrent of wanting her, its odd but interesting at the same time. I'm going to go find out what happens, peace.
Gah! Ajal and Dacado are morons! I feel like hitting them over the head with something! It's going to go terribly wrong, all of Kedyns thoughts about what could happen were enough to foreshadow that this ill fated plan will not go well, at least, I don't think. I like the way you turned Ajal and Dacado into real 'brothers' to Rayne but yet still having that undercurrent of wanting her, its odd but interesting at the same time. I'm going to go find out what happens, peace.
8/9/2007 c9 WriteKindOfLove
Again, great job of turning the characters into something other than just that, characters. The process of humanizing is tough and few authors manage to do it well enough to make their characters seem real and not just like cliched caricatures of human beings. You've achieved this by not having 'perfect' characters, the real mark of a juvenile author is when all the characters are good looking and wealthy et cetera but with no real heart to them. Great grammar and punctuation, still in keeping with your usual descriptive style and you made good use of exposition, not 'telling' your readers but 'showing' them your characters emotions and thoughts. Keep it up, PMS.
Again, great job of turning the characters into something other than just that, characters. The process of humanizing is tough and few authors manage to do it well enough to make their characters seem real and not just like cliched caricatures of human beings. You've achieved this by not having 'perfect' characters, the real mark of a juvenile author is when all the characters are good looking and wealthy et cetera but with no real heart to them. Great grammar and punctuation, still in keeping with your usual descriptive style and you made good use of exposition, not 'telling' your readers but 'showing' them your characters emotions and thoughts. Keep it up, PMS.
8/9/2007 c8 WriteKindOfLove
This was a very interesting chapter, it definitely humanized Rurac and even lent more credence to Rayne as a character that one can sympathize with. I loved the line-Silence flowed freely from her direction-it's very imaginative and thought provoking even for such a short description. I thought the concept of the 'scarred ancestor' is very interesting because it makes it seem like any birth they are associated with is tainted somehow, I guess that's where you get 'Mutts' as well, its a fairly derogatory term and works very well with the whole concept. Great work, I'm off to read the rest! P.S., sorry I was gone so long, my stupid email just sent me the alert AFTER you sent me your own email. Its useless lol. Peace
This was a very interesting chapter, it definitely humanized Rurac and even lent more credence to Rayne as a character that one can sympathize with. I loved the line-Silence flowed freely from her direction-it's very imaginative and thought provoking even for such a short description. I thought the concept of the 'scarred ancestor' is very interesting because it makes it seem like any birth they are associated with is tainted somehow, I guess that's where you get 'Mutts' as well, its a fairly derogatory term and works very well with the whole concept. Great work, I'm off to read the rest! P.S., sorry I was gone so long, my stupid email just sent me the alert AFTER you sent me your own email. Its useless lol. Peace
8/9/2007 c12 21insane in the brain
Ew MySpace. People always seem to add me, people who NEVER talk to me in school, last time I ended up with 800 friends and I'm sure as hell not that popular at school -.-
I like this update! I'm glad you didn''t give up on the story.
21insane in the brainEw MySpace. People always seem to add me, people who NEVER talk to me in school, last time I ended up with 800 friends and I'm sure as hell not that popular at school -.-
I like this update! I'm glad you didn''t give up on the story.
8/8/2007 c12 Lyra Waterflame
Heheheeheheehe... Good chapter! Please write more soon! I can't wait to find out what's going to happen next!
Heheheeheheehe... Good chapter! Please write more soon! I can't wait to find out what's going to happen next!
8/8/2007 c12 jess
Damn what took u so long! and YAY PICTUES! i'm so glad u don't use myspace cause it bugs me too! :D
please UPDATE again son!
Damn what took u so long! and YAY PICTUES! i'm so glad u don't use myspace cause it bugs me too! :D
please UPDATE again son!
8/7/2007 c12 3The Ferrett
I read this and it seems to ROCK. Oh come on... she's feisty, the descriptions are awesome and the backstory of Rurac is curious. Nice. ::))
3The FerrettI read this and it seems to ROCK. Oh come on... she's feisty, the descriptions are awesome and the backstory of Rurac is curious. Nice. ::))
7/31/2007 c1 1mapusyaw
i found another fic to devour. *sigh* who am i kidding, fictions always swallow my head, not the other way around.
=n_n!=
...will drop a more sensible review once i finished reading till chapter 11.
1mapusyawi found another fic to devour. *sigh* who am i kidding, fictions always swallow my head, not the other way around.
=n_n!=
...will drop a more sensible review once i finished reading till chapter 11.
7/30/2007 c11 1INUGIRL
omg you have to update soon, I love your story so far and I really want to find out what happens! :)
1INUGIRLomg you have to update soon, I love your story so far and I really want to find out what happens! :)
7/30/2007 c11 4in your head
I like your story very much. I wish to complain about the length but then, we cannot impose what we want on anyone right? I do wish something would happen between Kedyn and Rayne already, to embody their connection to each other. The suspense is killing me! Update soon.
4in your headI like your story very much. I wish to complain about the length but then, we cannot impose what we want on anyone right? I do wish something would happen between Kedyn and Rayne already, to embody their connection to each other. The suspense is killing me! Update soon.
7/17/2007 c11 21insane in the brain
Aww, I like this story. So intriguing! The two perspectives that weave the setting and pace. Full of sensory descriptions too. Lots of flair.
21insane in the brainAww, I like this story. So intriguing! The two perspectives that weave the setting and pace. Full of sensory descriptions too. Lots of flair.
7/11/2007 c1 5aferdeity
Upon further reaserch I have come to the starteling realization the un-complicate is not a word. Though the stupid spell check does not underline it in the most annoying corective shade I have ever see (red) they take it as the abreviation of the united states! Is that not ironic after all that rambling about language? Don't you just hate english even more?
5aferdeityUpon further reaserch I have come to the starteling realization the un-complicate is not a word. Though the stupid spell check does not underline it in the most annoying corective shade I have ever see (red) they take it as the abreviation of the united states! Is that not ironic after all that rambling about language? Don't you just hate english even more?