for Robots Kill Innocent Mind6/24/2007 c1 Mr. Flick
I liked it. One note though, in the fifth line it would be "I have chosen" or "I chose", but "I have chose" isn't right.
I liked it. One note though, in the fifth line it would be "I have chosen" or "I chose", but "I have chose" isn't right.
6/1/2007 c1 
7BornToThePurple
I like the beginning.
I do not like the use of the word "acknowledged" i.e. "acknowledged thoughts" I'm not sure exactly what you were going for with that. Also "economical" seems clumsy.
Other than that, I like it. It has potential.
I hope you don't mind the feedback, I know I like to get specific feedback for my poems and not just "It was good." or "I didn't like it."
7BornToThePurpleI like the beginning.
I do not like the use of the word "acknowledged" i.e. "acknowledged thoughts" I'm not sure exactly what you were going for with that. Also "economical" seems clumsy.
Other than that, I like it. It has potential.
I hope you don't mind the feedback, I know I like to get specific feedback for my poems and not just "It was good." or "I didn't like it."