for opposites attract5/5/2010 c5 Ghost n' Ghoul Girl
ok, this is very good so far, but you have a LOT of type-os. im very good with that stuff, so if you want i could betta you...thats when u send me a chapter before you post it on fictionpress and i read it, fix the spelling/grammer errors, look for any holes in the story line (ex: If sammantha is holding a spoon in the begging of the chapter, and by the end of the chapter, she appears to still be holding the spoon even though she is hanging from a cliff). i will show my changes in red and send it back to you. you can then either post what i fixed, or post your old one. i would be happy to be your betta, i love you story so far.
ok, this is very good so far, but you have a LOT of type-os. im very good with that stuff, so if you want i could betta you...thats when u send me a chapter before you post it on fictionpress and i read it, fix the spelling/grammer errors, look for any holes in the story line (ex: If sammantha is holding a spoon in the begging of the chapter, and by the end of the chapter, she appears to still be holding the spoon even though she is hanging from a cliff). i will show my changes in red and send it back to you. you can then either post what i fixed, or post your old one. i would be happy to be your betta, i love you story so far.
11/16/2007 c9 
38Around.the.Rainbow
I loved it. It was so emtoional, and just plain awesome. I really really liked it
38Around.the.RainbowI loved it. It was so emtoional, and just plain awesome. I really really liked it
9/13/2007 c1 colbsterrr
so, i don't care what your profile says, i'm going to say this: GRAMMAR GRAMMAR GRAMMAR! SPELLING SPELLING SPELLING! all of your writing pretty much sucks with out it.
so, i don't care what your profile says, i'm going to say this: GRAMMAR GRAMMAR GRAMMAR! SPELLING SPELLING SPELLING! all of your writing pretty much sucks with out it.
8/17/2007 c9 6Love Kills Slowly
I'm going to be honest, this story is horrible, the plot is ridiculous and lame, and the writing is choppy and rushed, learn how to capitalize and proof read.
6Love Kills SlowlyI'm going to be honest, this story is horrible, the plot is ridiculous and lame, and the writing is choppy and rushed, learn how to capitalize and proof read.
7/2/2007 c7 cxx
great story and storyline but you should proof read your work because the bad grammar made it hard to read but other than that good job!
great story and storyline but you should proof read your work because the bad grammar made it hard to read but other than that good job!
6/14/2007 c7 2psycho-vampire-princess
Sweet. U need to work on your punctuation and grammar. Other than that, Sweet!
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2psycho-vampire-princessSweet. U need to work on your punctuation and grammar. Other than that, Sweet!
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