for Nightmares6/13/2007 c1 
271Coeur Sans Espoir
I'm not trying to be rude, only trying to offer constructive criticism, but perhaps you could improve on your choice of vocabulary? I love the message that you're trying to convey, but the poem needs to be spiced up a little with some figurative language and varying words. Your poem flows very well, and you seem like you are a good poet from what I have seen. Keep writing.
271Coeur Sans EspoirI'm not trying to be rude, only trying to offer constructive criticism, but perhaps you could improve on your choice of vocabulary? I love the message that you're trying to convey, but the poem needs to be spiced up a little with some figurative language and varying words. Your poem flows very well, and you seem like you are a good poet from what I have seen. Keep writing.