7/11/2007 c1 lymli
it looks as if you were confused about "love" well, the poem is very lovely by the way.

6/13/2007 c1 Karl Drakken
I enjoyed reading this poem. The first half of the poem was excellent material. The three stanzas in the middle seemed a little dry to me. Those were "Iknew this wasn't right...Wouldn't feel this lame", "I had felt it once before...Weren't the feelings I should feel" and "This was just attraction...If you were only he." I would try to spice them up the same way that you did with the other stanzas. Or you can just leave them like that. The last stanzas were great, especially the very last one. Good use of rhyming at the end with "author" and "water". Again, I thought this was a decent work.