for What I Would Do For You5/29/2008 c4 
2Black-Rose-Upon-Thorn
U updated! o0ohh! Awesome! Well im updating in a week! THATS A PROMISE. rIGHT after exams dude. Now.. i sat and thought about this.. either i review best friend style and say: yeah! u've made a great start on showing her double personality! or i can be a critic.. so i decided on the critic. lol i can compliment u when i talk to you on the phone dude.
okay 1) have u reread what u wrote? *Accusingly* U were in a rush to get this out werent you? *sighs* Typical. After 4eva of not updating id want to do the same too: okay;
a. she made "a mad crab" for her phone. lool "grab" darling. thats what u meant.
b. Matt was "playing on hid X-box" ... "his"
c. Well there were a few others.. but im too lazy to pick them out. *grins sheepishly* Sorry!
erm ok 2) Duude a miniskirt has to be MINI. I dont think just above the knee skirts are actually classified as mini.. mid thighs yes.. but otherwise.. i think its a normal skirt for most people.. and id imagine for a barbie clan almost too conservative y'know?
3) YOU TOTALLY PLUMMETED MY IQ LEVEL. STOP WITH THE LIKES! Dear lord, they just made me wanna strangle them! Honestly i dont think its even possible to string that many 'likes' n one sentence. I beg of you *moans* make them tone down from now! You totally sent a message across. They'll drive me to the brink of insaniy and them u'd be responsible for my demise - (is that the right word?) lool.
4) U totally swore dude. *glares* is swearing ok now? Noo! no! no! no! *sighs* alas, such are the attitudes of high school kids. *shakes head* Kids nowadays, honestly! Heh heh, totally disregarding the fact that im 16. Like, whatEVER right? Like totally.
aww but i cant NOT put a compliment in there. I wanna see Shawn! I wanna see how he's living his life! Duude pleaasee! And i like Blue-haired girl. lol. Give us a name plz! So.. re-UPDATE! Go on... u know u want to!
Lovin ya loads! x
2Black-Rose-Upon-ThornU updated! o0ohh! Awesome! Well im updating in a week! THATS A PROMISE. rIGHT after exams dude. Now.. i sat and thought about this.. either i review best friend style and say: yeah! u've made a great start on showing her double personality! or i can be a critic.. so i decided on the critic. lol i can compliment u when i talk to you on the phone dude.
okay 1) have u reread what u wrote? *Accusingly* U were in a rush to get this out werent you? *sighs* Typical. After 4eva of not updating id want to do the same too: okay;
a. she made "a mad crab" for her phone. lool "grab" darling. thats what u meant.
b. Matt was "playing on hid X-box" ... "his"
c. Well there were a few others.. but im too lazy to pick them out. *grins sheepishly* Sorry!
erm ok 2) Duude a miniskirt has to be MINI. I dont think just above the knee skirts are actually classified as mini.. mid thighs yes.. but otherwise.. i think its a normal skirt for most people.. and id imagine for a barbie clan almost too conservative y'know?
3) YOU TOTALLY PLUMMETED MY IQ LEVEL. STOP WITH THE LIKES! Dear lord, they just made me wanna strangle them! Honestly i dont think its even possible to string that many 'likes' n one sentence. I beg of you *moans* make them tone down from now! You totally sent a message across. They'll drive me to the brink of insaniy and them u'd be responsible for my demise - (is that the right word?) lool.
4) U totally swore dude. *glares* is swearing ok now? Noo! no! no! no! *sighs* alas, such are the attitudes of high school kids. *shakes head* Kids nowadays, honestly! Heh heh, totally disregarding the fact that im 16. Like, whatEVER right? Like totally.
aww but i cant NOT put a compliment in there. I wanna see Shawn! I wanna see how he's living his life! Duude pleaasee! And i like Blue-haired girl. lol. Give us a name plz! So.. re-UPDATE! Go on... u know u want to!
Lovin ya loads! x
5/26/2008 c4 centenarian
Like okay...
there are a few grammatical mistakes but just read through it and you'll see it yourself. Kind of too lazy to point them all out. Well, this story sounds nice. Though all the "likes" do get annoying but i guess it's to be expected right? Well...I hope Shawn comes into the picture soon. Yeah, update soon.
Like okay...
there are a few grammatical mistakes but just read through it and you'll see it yourself. Kind of too lazy to point them all out. Well, this story sounds nice. Though all the "likes" do get annoying but i guess it's to be expected right? Well...I hope Shawn comes into the picture soon. Yeah, update soon.
8/30/2007 c3 SapphireEyes16
talk about writing a sad chapter and itz the first one! anywayz one thing i gotta point out when a person is shot the docz do surgery right away not dayz l8a, but update soon this k! cya @ skool
talk about writing a sad chapter and itz the first one! anywayz one thing i gotta point out when a person is shot the docz do surgery right away not dayz l8a, but update soon this k! cya @ skool
8/24/2007 c3 19ihrtbks
Please say this'll have a happy ending. You can put all the drama and angst you want in the middle, but have a happy ending. But I like this chapter, especially how you showed their relationship; but the last chapter about his deception...or am I assuming too much? ;P
UPDATE SOON!
19ihrtbksPlease say this'll have a happy ending. You can put all the drama and angst you want in the middle, but have a happy ending. But I like this chapter, especially how you showed their relationship; but the last chapter about his deception...or am I assuming too much? ;P
UPDATE SOON!
8/5/2007 c1 6concerto49
Thought instead of preview it should be a prologue.
Think you didn't need the line saying full summary. Just put it there.
Potential start, depends on what would happen.
Interesting.
Anyhow. Cheers.
6concerto49Thought instead of preview it should be a prologue.
Think you didn't need the line saying full summary. Just put it there.
Potential start, depends on what would happen.
Interesting.
Anyhow. Cheers.
6/22/2007 c1 1trix-a-belle
he got shot?
this chappy is only short but it interested me so it shall go on my alert list.
i'm interested now to see how, why who got shot etc.
see you next update
xNx
1trix-a-bellehe got shot?
this chappy is only short but it interested me so it shall go on my alert list.
i'm interested now to see how, why who got shot etc.
see you next update
xNx
6/18/2007 c2 SapphireEyes16
girl ur writin a story with a heartbreak in it! u really are growing up under my influence! but anyways u betta update soon and one more thing, actually two more things 1)u wrote prick stick (i believe you meant prit stick) 2)take the "and fall hopelessly in love?" out of the summary
ps: LJ i disagree with you 1)u hav not befrended a monster
2)she wouldn't chase u 2 hurt u coz the girl can't hurt a fly (i'm the violent 1 out of u lot which is'nt sayin much considering u lot hav neva had a fight b4)
girl ur writin a story with a heartbreak in it! u really are growing up under my influence! but anyways u betta update soon and one more thing, actually two more things 1)u wrote prick stick (i believe you meant prit stick) 2)take the "and fall hopelessly in love?" out of the summary
ps: LJ i disagree with you 1)u hav not befrended a monster
2)she wouldn't chase u 2 hurt u coz the girl can't hurt a fly (i'm the violent 1 out of u lot which is'nt sayin much considering u lot hav neva had a fight b4)
6/16/2007 c1 2Black-Rose-Upon-Thorn
I feel so deprived! i was NOT the 1st person to review! ...okay now i feel slightly offended, Lo0l ohh (i forgot ur reviewers name) but no hard feelings ya know why? Coz i got to tell her my feedback by PHONE! Ha! Take that! Lo0ol okay i think i should be goin to bed, drowsiness is getting to my poor, fragile head... *grins before goin off to find something else to read on fictionpress and thus submitting another wacky review to a poor unsuspecting writer* Poor writers.. they dont see me coming!
Lo0ol oh i actually 4got..
M'n's - hah, looks kinda cool u know maybe we should stick to it, oh my ever so favourite shampoo advert? *ducks outta the way before she gets smacked upside the head* LOL - THIS WAS SO GOOD *smiles slyly* even better than on the phone! Lol okay only coz this time the flashback was included! oh i SO feel a heartbreak cumin' up!. Man, u are one hellova mean girl! GR. lO0OL but it's ok, i befriended a monster and proud! ROFL *Takes a run for it, but knowin her best friend she knows that she is too laZY (the said best friend is, not me) to start chasing her, so she is safe for now from her evil wrath!* PHew! Well, thats a relief!
Lo0ol i think i wrote too much.. *scratches head* ah well, i love ya too my dear M'n'S!
2Black-Rose-Upon-ThornI feel so deprived! i was NOT the 1st person to review! ...okay now i feel slightly offended, Lo0l ohh (i forgot ur reviewers name) but no hard feelings ya know why? Coz i got to tell her my feedback by PHONE! Ha! Take that! Lo0ol okay i think i should be goin to bed, drowsiness is getting to my poor, fragile head... *grins before goin off to find something else to read on fictionpress and thus submitting another wacky review to a poor unsuspecting writer* Poor writers.. they dont see me coming!
Lo0ol oh i actually 4got..
M'n's - hah, looks kinda cool u know maybe we should stick to it, oh my ever so favourite shampoo advert? *ducks outta the way before she gets smacked upside the head* LOL - THIS WAS SO GOOD *smiles slyly* even better than on the phone! Lol okay only coz this time the flashback was included! oh i SO feel a heartbreak cumin' up!. Man, u are one hellova mean girl! GR. lO0OL but it's ok, i befriended a monster and proud! ROFL *Takes a run for it, but knowin her best friend she knows that she is too laZY (the said best friend is, not me) to start chasing her, so she is safe for now from her evil wrath!* PHew! Well, thats a relief!
Lo0ol i think i wrote too much.. *scratches head* ah well, i love ya too my dear M'n'S!
6/16/2007 c1 3i kiss to tell
really really good start! the beginning of the flashback seemed a bit muddled, not the writing but straightening out all the names and everything (i just get confused like that...) but i was like oh my gosh...wow! it was good.
3i kiss to tellreally really good start! the beginning of the flashback seemed a bit muddled, not the writing but straightening out all the names and everything (i just get confused like that...) but i was like oh my gosh...wow! it was good.