for Bad Blood8/24/2008 c1 criti-sized
Very cool short. The idea of two brothers fighting each other because they're on two different sides is seen a lot but is different each time. There wasn't much of a back story to it, but that's necessary in one-shots.
I liked teh flow that you had and how you allowed everything to sort of speak for itself.
C.S.
Very cool short. The idea of two brothers fighting each other because they're on two different sides is seen a lot but is different each time. There wasn't much of a back story to it, but that's necessary in one-shots.
I liked teh flow that you had and how you allowed everything to sort of speak for itself.
C.S.
7/15/2008 c1 
5Cresent Moon Vampire
Hey,
I'm reviewing your story. Thanks for the advice on Yahoo. This story was good and sad. But overall very good. I liked the idea too very different.
Nice Work.
5Cresent Moon VampireHey,
I'm reviewing your story. Thanks for the advice on Yahoo. This story was good and sad. But overall very good. I liked the idea too very different.
Nice Work.
7/4/2007 c1 Leaving Fictionpress
A little bit confusing, because I think you could've explained the back story a little better. Other than that, though, it's pretty good, and you didn't make any glaring errors - maybe a few places where you could've used commas, but that's minor. Overall, good job!
A little bit confusing, because I think you could've explained the back story a little better. Other than that, though, it's pretty good, and you didn't make any glaring errors - maybe a few places where you could've used commas, but that's minor. Overall, good job!