4/19/2008 c1 2theflyingcrabsareeatingmyhair
Clearly your word "analyze" has scared all the reviewers away. Absolutely pathetic.

I'm torn between the desire to win a prize and the desire to suck out my review and be done with it. I don't even really need the prize... Why would someone write a story for me, anyway? Beezahhro.

...Dude. This is way too irritating to even begin to try to analyze. When you write deep, you really go all the way, don't you? You should submit this to a damned english teacher... my excuse is a wannabe engineer. Besides, analyzing technically gets me no points, so I'll look later. I'll just do anon or something. Oh, btw, maybe you should change the prize to reviews.

Um... I like the imagery. You use lots of descriptive language which um... yeah. Makes me see what you're saying. I know, that's the good ol' standby when I have nothing to say, but hey. It counts, and I'll bbl.

I thought the jumps between scenes and ideas were too big, though. Maybe I'll understand it more when I spend the time figuring it out, but right now, I think it detracts from the pretty pictures your words give my brain thing because there seems to be very little to connect the entire piece.