for Oh Page, where art thou?12/1/2010 c2 
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Interesting...not too exciting, but the talking door grabbed my attention. Other than that, this first "chapter" was rather short. I'm guessing you're separating scenes of the story into chapters...?
Anyway, the grammar was nice but you missed one thing (well, all of you did)-you said the door cleared its throat. Doors do not have throats that I'm aware of. You should probably explain it or say something like "the door made a sound like a person clearing his throat".
(And, yes, I did read this to see if you'd make a good beta or not. Of course, this was multi-authored, so I'll have to see another; but I thought I might give you some input.)
5Th Ghst f Slss FrncInteresting...not too exciting, but the talking door grabbed my attention. Other than that, this first "chapter" was rather short. I'm guessing you're separating scenes of the story into chapters...?
Anyway, the grammar was nice but you missed one thing (well, all of you did)-you said the door cleared its throat. Doors do not have throats that I'm aware of. You should probably explain it or say something like "the door made a sound like a person clearing his throat".
(And, yes, I did read this to see if you'd make a good beta or not. Of course, this was multi-authored, so I'll have to see another; but I thought I might give you some input.)
6/22/2007 c12 1marjorievonnordeck
Heehee... so I just finished reading this... I guess this isn't a real review... but I wanted to say I though you were doing a good job at this and *I* have WAY less paitence for rewriting this thread of ours tha you do, lol. XD
~Marjorie
1marjorievonnordeckHeehee... so I just finished reading this... I guess this isn't a real review... but I wanted to say I though you were doing a good job at this and *I* have WAY less paitence for rewriting this thread of ours tha you do, lol. XD
~Marjorie