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8/22/2007 c3 1Frenchyesca
DUN DUN DUNN! (That's pretty much all I have to say except that I don't think I'd last on an island with Gab).
8/22/2007 c2 Frenchyesca
Bratty brats ;). I sense change?
8/22/2007 c1 Frenchyesca
Haha, they keep on saying the youth is messed up but we clearly know that.
7/5/2007 c1 Pinkeh
Now, though, she turned her head to her friend and lowered the sunglasses just enough to make eye contact with her. (I'd change this bit to say 'she turned her head in her friend's direction, lowering the sunglasses just enough to make eye contact with her')

“No insecurity.” Replied Alexandria Vaughn tersely, disappearing behind a newspaper as she spoke(I'd change this bit by moving replied to after tersely and disappearing to burying her nose)

“And you call me vane.” Gabriella responded with a scoff. Alexandria threw a grape at her. (change 'vane' to vain and change it to this 'Gabriella scoffed in response, which prompted her friend to throw a grape in her direction)

She asked after spreading her towel out on the ceader deck. (change ceader to cedar)
7/3/2007 c2 Preethy
I love it!

=)
6/25/2007 c1 CC
haha. loved it! keep up the great work!

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