for La Esclava del Diablo10/17/2014 c1 edu
DudeLike fucking NO no! Sge shouldn't have enjoyed the sex for Gods sakes, when things like this happens you cry for help cry to God for help and not stay there and be pleasured when you're being fucked by the devil himself! *takes a deep breath and shudders* anyway, so he killed her afterwards and brought her to a place where oy he can see and fuck her? Also, Gosh this was scary :(
DudeLike fucking NO no! Sge shouldn't have enjoyed the sex for Gods sakes, when things like this happens you cry for help cry to God for help and not stay there and be pleasured when you're being fucked by the devil himself! *takes a deep breath and shudders* anyway, so he killed her afterwards and brought her to a place where oy he can see and fuck her? Also, Gosh this was scary :(
1/14/2011 c1 lalala
I know this is going to sound incredibly stupid, but I wasn't even able to finish reading this story because it bloody scared me. LOL. Man, you're REALLY a good writer!
I know this is going to sound incredibly stupid, but I wasn't even able to finish reading this story because it bloody scared me. LOL. Man, you're REALLY a good writer!
4/18/2010 c1 nicolee
i dont know if you know this or not but esclavo is a male slave. your spanish is in male tense not female
i dont know if you know this or not but esclavo is a male slave. your spanish is in male tense not female
10/20/2008 c1 A-non-ee-mouses
I like this one best. You should write more to it. It's exciting and sexy :D
I like this one best. You should write more to it. It's exciting and sexy :D
10/6/2008 c1 Elodie Wolfe
I've read this so many times, but I realized I've never reviewed. I really liked this story, it got my mind thinking. And two questions for you. Does the devil kill Nina, and is she in his world or something. Those last few scenes confused me.
Love Middi~
I've read this so many times, but I realized I've never reviewed. I really liked this story, it got my mind thinking. And two questions for you. Does the devil kill Nina, and is she in his world or something. Those last few scenes confused me.
Love Middi~
7/31/2007 c1 
42Night.Shade8
Hello,
I must say I am quite impressed with this story. I have seen so many writers attempt a horror story, failing to do nothing more than turn it into a cheesy cliche (myself included).
There really isn't anything for me to critize; I love the wide range of vocabulary you have displayed, the tone of the story was incredible (I could feel my heart beat in fear), and I liked the plot you had created. The out-of-body experience, so to speak, has been done before, but you did a great job of making it your own.
You have acquired yourself a new fan Ms. Dhei. I look forward to the rest of the works you put forth.
- Markita
42Night.Shade8Hello,
I must say I am quite impressed with this story. I have seen so many writers attempt a horror story, failing to do nothing more than turn it into a cheesy cliche (myself included).
There really isn't anything for me to critize; I love the wide range of vocabulary you have displayed, the tone of the story was incredible (I could feel my heart beat in fear), and I liked the plot you had created. The out-of-body experience, so to speak, has been done before, but you did a great job of making it your own.
You have acquired yourself a new fan Ms. Dhei. I look forward to the rest of the works you put forth.
- Markita