for Purge11/23/2008 c1 
612simpleplan13
Thanks for your review a few weeks ago, sorry it took me so long to return it.
"for a lack of a backbone/to hold yourself up."... You need to hold yourself up with something. Or you lack a backbone to hold you up.
I think this metaphor is really interesting. It's very powerful and definitely gets the readers' attention. I also like the format in the second line. Those one word sentences emphasized your point. Nice job.
PS If you're bored check out the Review Game an/or its Review Marathon (links in my profile)
612simpleplan13Thanks for your review a few weeks ago, sorry it took me so long to return it.
"for a lack of a backbone/to hold yourself up."... You need to hold yourself up with something. Or you lack a backbone to hold you up.
I think this metaphor is really interesting. It's very powerful and definitely gets the readers' attention. I also like the format in the second line. Those one word sentences emphasized your point. Nice job.
PS If you're bored check out the Review Game an/or its Review Marathon (links in my profile)
6/30/2007 c1 60dollface and her cancer
it's hard and fast and so so bitter. it - is - good. my favorite lines; "bending over the toilet bowl / for a lack of a backbone / to hold yourself up". and, "keep purging, sweetheart. i'll never wipe your face again." it takes you and twists without mercy.
60dollface and her cancerit's hard and fast and so so bitter. it - is - good. my favorite lines; "bending over the toilet bowl / for a lack of a backbone / to hold yourself up". and, "keep purging, sweetheart. i'll never wipe your face again." it takes you and twists without mercy.