for The Apocalypse11/17/2007 c6 
12The Mac Scribble
Everything so far has been insanely well-written, but I have just one technical question. I don't know the answer myself, but do amnesiacs really forget things like what a root canal or a sparkler is? Or do they just forget memories, things that happened to them... and.. such... It seems like if Hannah can still read and talk and walk and etc, she would probably know what a sparkler is.
12The Mac ScribbleEverything so far has been insanely well-written, but I have just one technical question. I don't know the answer myself, but do amnesiacs really forget things like what a root canal or a sparkler is? Or do they just forget memories, things that happened to them... and.. such... It seems like if Hannah can still read and talk and walk and etc, she would probably know what a sparkler is.
11/17/2007 c6 OrangeSodaRocks
Wow, this story just keeps getting better and better with each new chapter! I was so excited that you updated, and then seeing Jake loosen up around Hannah and Hannah being playful with him...it just made me ten times more excited. I love this story!
So...all the guy-ness in the beginning was a nice touch. I like how even though Jake is cute and the class president, he's not like the IT guy, you know? Someone else is the captain of the basketball team, the captain compliments someone other than Jake...so on and so on. He's not the typical leading male character, and that's really refreshing. Actually, all of your characters are really unique!
Isaac's concern for Hannah is too sweet. Love that! And the banter between him and Jake had me cracking up! (And Jake referring to Hannah as "My Ayers" was so cute!) Of course, all the banter with Jake and Hannah was awesome too. I think it's cool that even though Hannah doesn't remember fighting with him...she still ends up fighting with him. It's a different kind of fighting, but it shows that, deep down, she's still herself, I guess...or something...I know what I'm trying to say, but I don't think I'm saying it right!
Excellent chapter though! I can't wait until you update again. I want to see more of Hannah and Jake together!
Wow, this story just keeps getting better and better with each new chapter! I was so excited that you updated, and then seeing Jake loosen up around Hannah and Hannah being playful with him...it just made me ten times more excited. I love this story!
So...all the guy-ness in the beginning was a nice touch. I like how even though Jake is cute and the class president, he's not like the IT guy, you know? Someone else is the captain of the basketball team, the captain compliments someone other than Jake...so on and so on. He's not the typical leading male character, and that's really refreshing. Actually, all of your characters are really unique!
Isaac's concern for Hannah is too sweet. Love that! And the banter between him and Jake had me cracking up! (And Jake referring to Hannah as "My Ayers" was so cute!) Of course, all the banter with Jake and Hannah was awesome too. I think it's cool that even though Hannah doesn't remember fighting with him...she still ends up fighting with him. It's a different kind of fighting, but it shows that, deep down, she's still herself, I guess...or something...I know what I'm trying to say, but I don't think I'm saying it right!
Excellent chapter though! I can't wait until you update again. I want to see more of Hannah and Jake together!
11/17/2007 c6 Valiant
I'm in love with this story, please please please, could you update soon? :D
I'm in love with this story, please please please, could you update soon? :D
11/17/2007 c6 2scenicmoods
I'm feeling generous today and your author's note tugged on my heart strings. You are going fabulous on this story. I love the character profiles of hannah, jake and issac. They are very good characters, each with thier own quirks. And I really like how they are realistically observant of their surroundings.
Hm the only other advice I could give you is that I sometimes get confused by the personalities of hannah's and jake's mothers, they are very similar and it would do good to differentiate between the two. And where is Jake's father? no mention of him so far...
otherwise keep up the awesome work!
2scenicmoodsI'm feeling generous today and your author's note tugged on my heart strings. You are going fabulous on this story. I love the character profiles of hannah, jake and issac. They are very good characters, each with thier own quirks. And I really like how they are realistically observant of their surroundings.
Hm the only other advice I could give you is that I sometimes get confused by the personalities of hannah's and jake's mothers, they are very similar and it would do good to differentiate between the two. And where is Jake's father? no mention of him so far...
otherwise keep up the awesome work!
11/17/2007 c6 eras
Wow Awesome story. I can tell you now that I really hope you continue on.
I cannot wait for your next chapter. It is really something original, and I love it.
Hannah's character is one of my favorites. I think I like it that she is so insecure with the people she should be the most relaxed with and so secure with the people she used to avoid.
One of my favorite parts so far was when she returned to school and was greeted by so many people, but Jake was pulling her away, because she would have probably said hi to all of them.
I makes me think of her as an alien, you know. So unsure of what is going on and probably confused if what she is doing is the right thing or the wrong thing.
I love it all.
Also, Jake. Now you didn't paint him as the perfect character that felt heart broken because of what happened to her. I mean he was right down assholish ( i know that is not a word) but it was an honest reaction.
No he didn't realize his love for her when he heard but more like. 'So.. sorry that happened, can I go back to sleep?'
I cannot wait for your next update.
Ingrid
Wow Awesome story. I can tell you now that I really hope you continue on.
I cannot wait for your next chapter. It is really something original, and I love it.
Hannah's character is one of my favorites. I think I like it that she is so insecure with the people she should be the most relaxed with and so secure with the people she used to avoid.
One of my favorite parts so far was when she returned to school and was greeted by so many people, but Jake was pulling her away, because she would have probably said hi to all of them.
I makes me think of her as an alien, you know. So unsure of what is going on and probably confused if what she is doing is the right thing or the wrong thing.
I love it all.
Also, Jake. Now you didn't paint him as the perfect character that felt heart broken because of what happened to her. I mean he was right down assholish ( i know that is not a word) but it was an honest reaction.
No he didn't realize his love for her when he heard but more like. 'So.. sorry that happened, can I go back to sleep?'
I cannot wait for your next update.
Ingrid
11/16/2007 c6 redjello
Hey, I love it. It's hilarious... and a good plot too.. can't wait to read the next chapter.
Krey
Hey, I love it. It's hilarious... and a good plot too.. can't wait to read the next chapter.
Krey
11/16/2007 c6 8summer-insomniac
Aww! So cute! :) It's like 1:15am where I am while I write this, so pardon the lack of actual compliments, but I loved that chapter. Jake's just amazing, haha, and Isaac is such a loveable character. You're doing a wonderful job deepening all of the characters' relationships with each other and Hannah's being brought out more and, ahh. So good. =]
8summer-insomniacAww! So cute! :) It's like 1:15am where I am while I write this, so pardon the lack of actual compliments, but I loved that chapter. Jake's just amazing, haha, and Isaac is such a loveable character. You're doing a wonderful job deepening all of the characters' relationships with each other and Hannah's being brought out more and, ahh. So good. =]
11/16/2007 c1 candypop117 again
dammit i hate it when they don't let you review again. meh.
anwayys, i just got a confirmation that tater tots are called potatoe pom-poms around here.
dammit i hate it when they don't let you review again. meh.
anwayys, i just got a confirmation that tater tots are called potatoe pom-poms around here.
11/16/2007 c6 izzo17
Wop! Wop! New Chappie yay!
“My Ayers”
I had to re-read that part a couple of times
I wasn’t sure if it was Jake who spoke those words. Lol
This chapter is really adorable, and Jake—what can I say?
My opinion of him is kind of all blurry right now, if that makes any sense
but if anything, this chapter is about to have me head over heels for this boy
So I’m sure I’ll be totally swept off my feet in the future chapters *hint hint*
Hmm… well I’m already a sucker for guy’s with the name starting with J especially, Jake & Jacob anyway and Jake happens to have both lol
Well, that was another awesome chapter! Thanks for updating!
I think tater tots are just hash browns around here [where I live that is] – or may be not oh good god I’m so hopeless
x.
Wop! Wop! New Chappie yay!
“My Ayers”
I had to re-read that part a couple of times
I wasn’t sure if it was Jake who spoke those words. Lol
This chapter is really adorable, and Jake—what can I say?
My opinion of him is kind of all blurry right now, if that makes any sense
but if anything, this chapter is about to have me head over heels for this boy
So I’m sure I’ll be totally swept off my feet in the future chapters *hint hint*
Hmm… well I’m already a sucker for guy’s with the name starting with J especially, Jake & Jacob anyway and Jake happens to have both lol
Well, that was another awesome chapter! Thanks for updating!
I think tater tots are just hash browns around here [where I live that is] – or may be not oh good god I’m so hopeless
x.
11/16/2007 c6 maidengarnet
Well, I give you huge kudos for not threatening your readers to cut them off if you don't get enough reviews... and I'm sorry I haven't been saying anything! I'm probably a prime example of what you have happening now... I love what I'm reading, but tend to be too shy or don't know what to say. I hope you stay in the writing mood, though, I really want to see what happens next, and fast! Please write more soon!
Well, I give you huge kudos for not threatening your readers to cut them off if you don't get enough reviews... and I'm sorry I haven't been saying anything! I'm probably a prime example of what you have happening now... I love what I'm reading, but tend to be too shy or don't know what to say. I hope you stay in the writing mood, though, I really want to see what happens next, and fast! Please write more soon!
11/16/2007 c6 3G.Catherine
okay that was great. :) 'My Ayers?' was my FAVOURITE line. :) and its sweet really. I do believe there is AMAZING potential for this.
3G.Catherineokay that was great. :) 'My Ayers?' was my FAVOURITE line. :) and its sweet really. I do believe there is AMAZING potential for this.
11/10/2007 c5 izzo17
whoa! I love this story! A friend of mine (Hannah, i think she reviewed your work previously) raved about it to me so I thought I'd check it out.
I finally got a chance to and started yesterday & now I'm totally addicted! I really want more of this story! So please do update soon.
Jake amuses me especially after the accident. I love how consistent you've been with his character.
Anyways, your story is incredibly enjoyable and of course, hilarious. I laughed so hard about tator tot or whatever it's called lol I had to do some google-ing cos' i had no idea what it was!
whoa! I love this story! A friend of mine (Hannah, i think she reviewed your work previously) raved about it to me so I thought I'd check it out.
I finally got a chance to and started yesterday & now I'm totally addicted! I really want more of this story! So please do update soon.
Jake amuses me especially after the accident. I love how consistent you've been with his character.
Anyways, your story is incredibly enjoyable and of course, hilarious. I laughed so hard about tator tot or whatever it's called lol I had to do some google-ing cos' i had no idea what it was!
11/4/2007 c5 eeken
things between jake and hannah are progressing so slowly. =( but i know that's the way it's supposed to happen. update soon!
things between jake and hannah are progressing so slowly. =( but i know that's the way it's supposed to happen. update soon!
11/3/2007 c5 OrangeSodaRocks
I'm absolutely loving Jake's attitude to Hannah and how much it confuses her. Aww, and it's so sweet that Isaac tries to protect Hannah from knowing that Jake doesn't like her.
As I said before, this story seems really realistic, from Jake distancing himself from Hannah, to Hannah's feelings about her friends and Jake. It's a good point that Hannah is more comfortable around Jake and his friends because they're so laidback, especially in comparison to her friends. Ethan not exclaiming about how much Hannah loves/d tater tots was sweet too! I actually think he and Hannah would be adorable together...
Ooh, did Greg lie to Hannah? Not that I expect you to answer that. But since she thought his behavior was suspicious...and he DID seem suspicious...it makes me wonder. Another thing: you seem so familiar with the area that Hannah and Jake live in, and, since I saw that their high school and all the restaurants you named are real, I was wondering...have you ever been to part of Ohio they're from? Or are you not basing it on how the town really is?
Anyway...loved the new chapter! And I can't wait until you update again! Especally with Jake apparently trying to be nicer to Hannah now...
I'm absolutely loving Jake's attitude to Hannah and how much it confuses her. Aww, and it's so sweet that Isaac tries to protect Hannah from knowing that Jake doesn't like her.
As I said before, this story seems really realistic, from Jake distancing himself from Hannah, to Hannah's feelings about her friends and Jake. It's a good point that Hannah is more comfortable around Jake and his friends because they're so laidback, especially in comparison to her friends. Ethan not exclaiming about how much Hannah loves/d tater tots was sweet too! I actually think he and Hannah would be adorable together...
Ooh, did Greg lie to Hannah? Not that I expect you to answer that. But since she thought his behavior was suspicious...and he DID seem suspicious...it makes me wonder. Another thing: you seem so familiar with the area that Hannah and Jake live in, and, since I saw that their high school and all the restaurants you named are real, I was wondering...have you ever been to part of Ohio they're from? Or are you not basing it on how the town really is?
Anyway...loved the new chapter! And I can't wait until you update again! Especally with Jake apparently trying to be nicer to Hannah now...