for In the NICK of Time7/12/2007 c3 
19Le Cosmonaute
Gah! Nix the Author's Notes. Seriously. Well, disappointingly, you didn't develope the plot more, and you made Ruby's hatred of her sister less consistent in here. Grammar, but no one pays attention to that, as far as I know, and I hope you write more soon. ** ^.^ Anyway, the plot you have so far, and where it's going, is really good, so keep up the good work and please don't forget about it!
19Le CosmonauteGah! Nix the Author's Notes. Seriously. Well, disappointingly, you didn't develope the plot more, and you made Ruby's hatred of her sister less consistent in here. Grammar, but no one pays attention to that, as far as I know, and I hope you write more soon. ** ^.^ Anyway, the plot you have so far, and where it's going, is really good, so keep up the good work and please don't forget about it!
7/5/2007 c2 Le Cosmonaute
I don't know why, but I suddenly hate Ruby. You're story's good though, grammar and whatever, and you're throwing tenses around, but what ever. You might want to get more descriptive (I kow I tell you this almost every week when I see your writing) and yes, I know you think you get too descriptive, but all you have to do is describe it to death, then edit out the annoyingly detailed bits to where it's perectly balanced. Like the different chocolates in chocolate pie. That was actually fast, you know, for you updating. Or anyone updating, even though it was short, and the chapter said a lot. In fact, despite the lack of complete description, it's VIVID! Good work, but remember: use the DASH!
I don't know why, but I suddenly hate Ruby. You're story's good though, grammar and whatever, and you're throwing tenses around, but what ever. You might want to get more descriptive (I kow I tell you this almost every week when I see your writing) and yes, I know you think you get too descriptive, but all you have to do is describe it to death, then edit out the annoyingly detailed bits to where it's perectly balanced. Like the different chocolates in chocolate pie. That was actually fast, you know, for you updating. Or anyone updating, even though it was short, and the chapter said a lot. In fact, despite the lack of complete description, it's VIVID! Good work, but remember: use the DASH!
7/3/2007 c1 Le Cosmonaute
I think you had too much needless conflict between the sisters, even though Ruby does hate that brat. Some of the things made it seem as though the Brat had done something truly offensive, but she didn't, so you might want to tone it down.
You should also use more contractions, because that way it would flow easier.
You used my title! Who! Ha. Okay, so, update soon, please, though I know what happens and know you probably won't!
Bye!
I think you had too much needless conflict between the sisters, even though Ruby does hate that brat. Some of the things made it seem as though the Brat had done something truly offensive, but she didn't, so you might want to tone it down.
You should also use more contractions, because that way it would flow easier.
You used my title! Who! Ha. Okay, so, update soon, please, though I know what happens and know you probably won't!
Bye!