for Larry the Knight8/7/2008 c1 
1FemaleJonas
haha, i didnt even have to read it again, i remember it vividly in my mind from when i read it like 4 months ago with my friend
and i recall it being VERY funny, and i enjoyed very much
i also remember me and said friend, reading it aloud, with me doing different voices, it was very funny, and i remember having trouble reading it because i was laughing so much!
1FemaleJonashaha, i didnt even have to read it again, i remember it vividly in my mind from when i read it like 4 months ago with my friend
and i recall it being VERY funny, and i enjoyed very much
i also remember me and said friend, reading it aloud, with me doing different voices, it was very funny, and i remember having trouble reading it because i was laughing so much!
7/22/2008 c1 1Just Nilla
I just read this again and it totally made me laugh even harder. I haven't been on FP in a few months and had to refresh my memory of this story. I LOVE IT! Keep up the good work, Danielle.
P.S. I like the picture of your bird on your profile. How cute!
~LaughableLime... a.k.a. Totalspaz(changed penname) and Filled_with_energy
1Just NillaI just read this again and it totally made me laugh even harder. I haven't been on FP in a few months and had to refresh my memory of this story. I LOVE IT! Keep up the good work, Danielle.
P.S. I like the picture of your bird on your profile. How cute!
~LaughableLime... a.k.a. Totalspaz(changed penname) and Filled_with_energy
5/29/2008 c2 13Dawnella
Hello again. I loved this, =) In fact, I love parodies in general =) Nice to note that Rapunzel needs a megaphone to talk to Larry. I've also noticed the official chapter titles, which put me in mind of Howl's Moving Castle, though doubtless other such books have the same style. This is one reason why fantasy is my favorite genre; you can do so much with it! Plus, the stereotypes are fun to knock down. =)
My favorite part was the crows, I think.
I like this; you should think about getting more chapters out more often. (nod)
13DawnellaHello again. I loved this, =) In fact, I love parodies in general =) Nice to note that Rapunzel needs a megaphone to talk to Larry. I've also noticed the official chapter titles, which put me in mind of Howl's Moving Castle, though doubtless other such books have the same style. This is one reason why fantasy is my favorite genre; you can do so much with it! Plus, the stereotypes are fun to knock down. =)
My favorite part was the crows, I think.
I like this; you should think about getting more chapters out more often. (nod)
2/4/2008 c2 5Mad Asher
I like you're sense of humor, it's great. Both times you have twisted a perfectly good fairy tale, when having Larry the knight call Rapunzel to let down her hair, she answers, 'no, im thinking of cutting it off.'
It made me chuckle actually, at least. The knight in vain is so funny because his one-track mind is bent on saving Rapunzel, and she insists she doesn't need to be saved. Also the part where the stubborn Larry insists he can break open the 'escape-proof' door. However, I don't like your simile, 'he crumpled like a wizard under pressure.' I think that doesn't really give the reader an image, and the connection between Larry and a wizard is somewhat...opposite and unimaginable. Bit confused about what's going on at the end, however. And a flying dragon 0_o. Cliche. Other than that I think you've got great humor.
5Mad AsherI like you're sense of humor, it's great. Both times you have twisted a perfectly good fairy tale, when having Larry the knight call Rapunzel to let down her hair, she answers, 'no, im thinking of cutting it off.'
It made me chuckle actually, at least. The knight in vain is so funny because his one-track mind is bent on saving Rapunzel, and she insists she doesn't need to be saved. Also the part where the stubborn Larry insists he can break open the 'escape-proof' door. However, I don't like your simile, 'he crumpled like a wizard under pressure.' I think that doesn't really give the reader an image, and the connection between Larry and a wizard is somewhat...opposite and unimaginable. Bit confused about what's going on at the end, however. And a flying dragon 0_o. Cliche. Other than that I think you've got great humor.
12/28/2007 c2 25the face in the window
Oh dear, I think I almost fell of my chair laughing. Amazing chapter.
Rowan.
25the face in the windowOh dear, I think I almost fell of my chair laughing. Amazing chapter.
Rowan.
10/21/2007 c1 5The Grammar Nazi
This is me, writing another review for one of your stories.
I really liked this, it made me laugh out loud (which is always a good thing!). I just have a couple of suggestions, if I may. I noticed that you were doing the same thing that I'm working on right now. Make sure that you SHOW, not TELL. It's hard sometimes, because you have to put a lot of thought into every single sentence you write. In the end, though, it's worth it. The whole story begins to flow and sound a lot better. Try reading it aloud to yourself; this makes it pretty easy to spot anything that should be changed.
Other than that, yet another job well done (even if this is an old story). I look forward to chapter two. =D
5The Grammar NaziThis is me, writing another review for one of your stories.
I really liked this, it made me laugh out loud (which is always a good thing!). I just have a couple of suggestions, if I may. I noticed that you were doing the same thing that I'm working on right now. Make sure that you SHOW, not TELL. It's hard sometimes, because you have to put a lot of thought into every single sentence you write. In the end, though, it's worth it. The whole story begins to flow and sound a lot better. Try reading it aloud to yourself; this makes it pretty easy to spot anything that should be changed.
Other than that, yet another job well done (even if this is an old story). I look forward to chapter two. =D
9/11/2007 c1 Random Word Artist
Laugh, laugh, laugh. I loved it! It was hilarious. Please update soon!
Laugh, laugh, laugh. I loved it! It was hilarious. Please update soon!
7/23/2007 c1 108Qzie
First of all- awesome title. :D Larry was totally awesome, and I love Rapunzel's rage and how she tried to blow Larry away with a hair dryer! That was just too perfect. And then the electricity went out. The last scene was great, I like how they're talking about how to keep Rapunzel in her tower. Chimeras... ahh, that's great. Brilliant story!
108QzieFirst of all- awesome title. :D Larry was totally awesome, and I love Rapunzel's rage and how she tried to blow Larry away with a hair dryer! That was just too perfect. And then the electricity went out. The last scene was great, I like how they're talking about how to keep Rapunzel in her tower. Chimeras... ahh, that's great. Brilliant story!
7/12/2007 c1 463All Alone With Her Thoughts
That was really sweet! I can't wait to see what happens next!
Rowan.
463All Alone With Her ThoughtsThat was really sweet! I can't wait to see what happens next!
Rowan.