
5/26/2011 c1 recycle rhymes
I like how it is sing-songy. it's like you wrote it to a song. at least looks like it.
I like how it is sing-songy. it's like you wrote it to a song. at least looks like it.
11/26/2008 c2
5Camelia Sinensis
gorgeous.
you remind me of regina spektor.
and a bit of charles budowski.

gorgeous.
you remind me of regina spektor.
and a bit of charles budowski.
6/29/2008 c2
84persephone in waiting
The interesting thing about both chapters of this poem is that the phrases you use such as "yeah, i love the way/you close your eyes/and sigh deep like you're/used to releasing things" are super suggestive, whether or not they're meant to be. Notwithstanding, these are both passionate, filled with desire, and leave me with thoughts reminiscent of my own experiences with beautiful boys.

The interesting thing about both chapters of this poem is that the phrases you use such as "yeah, i love the way/you close your eyes/and sigh deep like you're/used to releasing things" are super suggestive, whether or not they're meant to be. Notwithstanding, these are both passionate, filled with desire, and leave me with thoughts reminiscent of my own experiences with beautiful boys.
4/17/2008 c2
8Written
wow, just gorgeous. you have a real way with words and you managed to say a lot with very few.

wow, just gorgeous. you have a real way with words and you managed to say a lot with very few.
4/17/2008 c1 Written
have you seen the movie by the same name as your title? I love it. the word play is just wonderful.
have you seen the movie by the same name as your title? I love it. the word play is just wonderful.
4/5/2008 c2
29narcissus loved me
the comparison is mind-bogglingly crazy.
i am now officially infatuated with this one!

the comparison is mind-bogglingly crazy.
i am now officially infatuated with this one!
2/18/2008 c2
91fairytale failure
Interesting comparision! I love food similies =P It makes it really easy to understand what you mean, as long as the reader has tasted a cream puff before.

Interesting comparision! I love food similies =P It makes it really easy to understand what you mean, as long as the reader has tasted a cream puff before.
2/18/2008 c1 fairytale failure
Aw, I love this so much. You spend most of the poem praising this person, and in the last two lines you make it bittersweet as well. I like your hyphenated adjectives, like 'shy-gun' and 'heart-melt'.
Aw, I love this so much. You spend most of the poem praising this person, and in the last two lines you make it bittersweet as well. I like your hyphenated adjectives, like 'shy-gun' and 'heart-melt'.
2/10/2008 c1
65Nemonus
Good. For once I'm not sure what else to say. I like your odd, italicized adjectives and the lack of capitalization. The last line made the poem sad, where before it wasn't.

Good. For once I'm not sure what else to say. I like your odd, italicized adjectives and the lack of capitalization. The last line made the poem sad, where before it wasn't.
12/4/2007 c1 lymli
my favorite part: you think you’re a
break-my-heart boy
with your shy-gun smile
I really love this.
good poem.
my favorite part: you think you’re a
break-my-heart boy
with your shy-gun smile
I really love this.
good poem.
8/19/2007 c1
14kit feral
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love!
"it’s the way you lean that got me snared"
though I love the perfectperfect ending, that's my favorite line. I have a leaning fetish. boys have stupid torsos that curve so nicely when they lean.
so yeah, I totally love this in a squealy fan girl way. in case you couldn't tell. : P

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love!
"it’s the way you lean that got me snared"
though I love the perfectperfect ending, that's my favorite line. I have a leaning fetish. boys have stupid torsos that curve so nicely when they lean.
so yeah, I totally love this in a squealy fan girl way. in case you couldn't tell. : P