for Woman of Fortune7/19/2007 c1 
3E. Knight
Compelling introduction. Although the last paragraph needs to be cleaned up grammatically.
3E. KnightCompelling introduction. Although the last paragraph needs to be cleaned up grammatically.
7/19/2007 c1 4J. A. Kossler
Good prologue. Short and to the point. I can see promise in this story.
I don't entirely like the idea that she's lost a parent (it's been done way too many times) but if you take good care of the plot point, it should be okay. Just remember to seperate your story from all the others. Make sure it becomes yours and unique. Then it'll be cool.
Good luck!
-JAK
(Please check out my story, too! :D)
4J. A. KosslerGood prologue. Short and to the point. I can see promise in this story.
I don't entirely like the idea that she's lost a parent (it's been done way too many times) but if you take good care of the plot point, it should be okay. Just remember to seperate your story from all the others. Make sure it becomes yours and unique. Then it'll be cool.
Good luck!
-JAK
(Please check out my story, too! :D)