for Summer Nights9/1/2007 c8 
91fairytale failure
Some of these chapters seriously seem like the epitomization of summer to me. Some seem more personal, and are still lovely. This is a great colloection!
91fairytale failureSome of these chapters seriously seem like the epitomization of summer to me. Some seem more personal, and are still lovely. This is a great colloection!
8/13/2007 c8 78Ironic Presence
I love this poem. I want to do this someday, except all my friends are "normal". *rolling eyes* Ah, well, then I shall go out alone. ;)
I think you have a lot of potential as a writer. Keep it up! I hope my reviews have amused/cheered you.
Ironic Presence
78Ironic PresenceI love this poem. I want to do this someday, except all my friends are "normal". *rolling eyes* Ah, well, then I shall go out alone. ;)
I think you have a lot of potential as a writer. Keep it up! I hope my reviews have amused/cheered you.
Ironic Presence
8/13/2007 c7 Ironic Presence
Yeah, this is a familiar feeling. I think you portrayed the emotions very well.
Yeah, this is a familiar feeling. I think you portrayed the emotions very well.
8/13/2007 c6 Ironic Presence
Ha ha, yes, no one can resist the authority of ice cream. I have to like this one 'cause it's about ice cream, and two of my favorite flavors, at that.
Ha ha, yes, no one can resist the authority of ice cream. I have to like this one 'cause it's about ice cream, and two of my favorite flavors, at that.
8/13/2007 c5 Ironic Presence
This one is pretty interesting. It took me a little while to figure out that you're talking about the moon (I think-am I right?). I like it-it's different and pretty creative.
This one is pretty interesting. It took me a little while to figure out that you're talking about the moon (I think-am I right?). I like it-it's different and pretty creative.
8/13/2007 c4 Ironic Presence
I like this one. It's melancholy. Call me weird, but I like melancholy poems a lot. Keep it up.
I like this one. It's melancholy. Call me weird, but I like melancholy poems a lot. Keep it up.
8/13/2007 c3 Ironic Presence
Interesting...the cheesecake part in the beginning is interesting, but it doesn't connect to the rest of the poem.
I like this poem besides that.
Interesting...the cheesecake part in the beginning is interesting, but it doesn't connect to the rest of the poem.
I like this poem besides that.
8/13/2007 c1 Ironic Presence
Hmm... interesting... I like your description of the sun setting. It was, if you don't mind my saying so, delicious. I could picture its beauty.
I think the window not rolling down was kind of weird, and then the hugging someone/something was a little incomplete, though. I don't really understand the restraint contributing to the feeling of being fully alive, and then you say something about hugging someone, but it's not really developed. I think the redeeming factor is defintely your description of the sun. ;) I don't think it's a bad poem at all, just a little rough.
I'll read the rest of your poems in the set.
Hmm... interesting... I like your description of the sun setting. It was, if you don't mind my saying so, delicious. I could picture its beauty.
I think the window not rolling down was kind of weird, and then the hugging someone/something was a little incomplete, though. I don't really understand the restraint contributing to the feeling of being fully alive, and then you say something about hugging someone, but it's not really developed. I think the redeeming factor is defintely your description of the sun. ;) I don't think it's a bad poem at all, just a little rough.
I'll read the rest of your poems in the set.
8/1/2007 c8 16Spuriously-WoodsWorth
Ok I need an explanation on everything. And mint chocolate chip is my favorite ice cream too.
16Spuriously-WoodsWorthOk I need an explanation on everything. And mint chocolate chip is my favorite ice cream too.
7/30/2007 c1 463All Alone With Her Thoughts
"but the window won’t roll down enough./Stupid child safety." Oh, that always pisses the hell out of me too.
Anyhow, great poem. And thanks for the reviews, by the way!
Rowan.
463All Alone With Her Thoughts"but the window won’t roll down enough./Stupid child safety." Oh, that always pisses the hell out of me too.
Anyhow, great poem. And thanks for the reviews, by the way!
Rowan.
7/25/2007 c1 16Spuriously-WoodsWorth
That was a good piece of writing. And as always, explain...please.
16Spuriously-WoodsWorthThat was a good piece of writing. And as always, explain...please.