
7/23/2007 c1
5Something Strange
Wow, this certainly was a very unique, very strange story! I have never read anything like it! It was very well written, kept me till the end. The ending was really shocking. I liked this story, great job!

Wow, this certainly was a very unique, very strange story! I have never read anything like it! It was very well written, kept me till the end. The ending was really shocking. I liked this story, great job!
7/20/2007 c1
6concerto49
I can't imagine having a father like that either.
"which between most couples is sweet," - was
"As she reached page ten a horrible plant engulfed Kelly so she breathed her last breath." - knew what you mean, but wasn't as good
"He slammed the book closed on the demonic plant and put it in a metal cage." - shut would have been better
"If communication is the key to a relationship," - was
Yes! You used tragic. I know so many people that can't tell between tragedy. Something I decided to tell people the true answer in my FSP.
"That is how she found herself in a life-death situation." - was
"and flipped her into the position you are in when a cop arrests you. " - shouldn't use 2nd person here
The ending was ...maybe shocking.
Side note: always thought the name was Chel-se-a until I recently met a friend with that name who corrected me
Anyhow, cheers!

I can't imagine having a father like that either.
"which between most couples is sweet," - was
"As she reached page ten a horrible plant engulfed Kelly so she breathed her last breath." - knew what you mean, but wasn't as good
"He slammed the book closed on the demonic plant and put it in a metal cage." - shut would have been better
"If communication is the key to a relationship," - was
Yes! You used tragic. I know so many people that can't tell between tragedy. Something I decided to tell people the true answer in my FSP.
"That is how she found herself in a life-death situation." - was
"and flipped her into the position you are in when a cop arrests you. " - shouldn't use 2nd person here
The ending was ...maybe shocking.
Side note: always thought the name was Chel-se-a until I recently met a friend with that name who corrected me
Anyhow, cheers!