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6/2/2008 c9 13Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu
Herro! It's me again lol! :D Anyway, finally reached to the updated chapter. Guess this will be on hiatus for some time, huh? Anyway, interesting chapter here. Gej's agenda is still unknown, so I'll be waiting to see what you can do for that. ;) And I wonder what Exert and co will do next. Anyway, good to be back reviewing this. And yeah, hope to see your reviews for Circles of Arven soon. I've just checked and you've stopped at chapter 1 after the prologue. ;)
4/28/2008 c8 Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu
Well, the whole issue of Gej seems to reimind me of the False Prophet part in Revelations, but I guess it's me... anyway, I'm not sure if this is counted as a filler, but I'll have to say that this is a good chapter here. The theory on the Evil Eye is also interesting and I'll be waiting to see more in practical terms. Anyway, interesting to see what will happen next. And yeah, thanks very much for your latest review on Elven Chronicles. Hope to see more of your reviews for my other stories soon! ^^ Bye! :)
1/7/2008 c7 Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu
Heya it's me again lol! XD Anyway, first things first thanks very much for your review for Bloodfire just now. It really made my day. :) Anyway, good chapter here. Not much of a fighting scene here, but still, you did the chapter well. Really wonder what will happen now that The Eye is awakened. Anyway, if there's any CCs I can come up with, it's that maybe you could have tried developing the characters further by now. Also, there's this issue of Gej being the evil guy. Basically, what I want to say is that try to give him a reason behind the person he is now. Everything has a reason behind it unless you're talking about God's existence. Basiaclly, don't make him out to be a one dimensional villain. You can do a lot on his development and past, I'm pretty sure of that. I'll be looking forward to see what you can do with him. Anyway, spoken enough for now. Thanks again for your review and hope to see more of them for my other stories as well soon! ^^ Bye! :)
9/10/2007 c6 Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu
Well, nothing much to complain here... anyway, good decsriptive scenes again. I really wonder what will happen next. And yeah, the idea of mobile armor was cool. Apart from that, nothing much to say except that this is a freakin' cliffie you've got here. Anyway, thanks for your reviews for Circles of Arven so far. Hope to see more of them soon! ^^ Bye! :)
9/4/2007 c4 9Shang
Well, if they're afraid of just nine people, then I'd say Exert picked a slightly weird team. Since Gej is supposed to be popular, it was safe to assume his escort will have a big number, thus he should've chosen extraordinary people. Being outnumbered by three and so scared of it seems slightly like the teaming up lost its point.

Besides that the chapter was good, though at first I got slightly lost in the dailogue (meaning who says what).

Never the less this is going pretty nicely and I'll stick around to read more.
9/4/2007 c3 Shang
A, so we finally get to learn more about Exert's companions. Delalith and Saio seems quite interesting, the rest don't stand out IMO. But Shylee's sickness is an unexpected idea (makes it seem kinda antifeminist for the only girl to get sick though ^_^').

Well, I do hope there's gonna be some action soon, but I'd be greatly surprised if the team were to go against Gej this soon.
9/4/2007 c2 Shang
Finally I've managed to read a bit more of this.

I must say that the chapters are still rather short. I'd advice you extend them at least by 1/2 more. Basically not that much happens during one.

This chappie was nicely written. Quite a bit of descriptions, but in most cases they were nicely done. The story still moves forward, though maybe not exactly at the paste one would like.

But this is still pretty intriguing and I'll be reading some more.
8/30/2007 c5 13Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu
Well, thanks for your review. Anyway, good description here. I do think that the scene was rather well described in the whole. Just thinking to tell you that maybe you can add more details in the fighting scenes. As for that vision Exert had, it really sounds creepy to say the least. Like something bad was about to happen... and yeah, the whole red dagger issue really sounds like something a skilled ninja might do in manga... anyway, thanks very much for your review for COA. Hope to see more of them in the future! ^^ Bye! :)
8/19/2007 c1 1ZeektheBard
I gotta admit that your idea for the fantasy world is pretty original. And the plot is pretty intriguing.

I really do wonder where this story can go and I'll read more of it later.

So far: nice job!
8/14/2007 c4 13Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu
Heya there! Thanks very much for your review for Circles of Arven! It really makes my day! :) Anyway, on with the review. Ok, basically, nothing much to complain here. And since Gej's here, then I assume that there can be some fireworks in the future chapters, huh? I really wonder about Saio's agenda here from what I see in this chapter. Interesting to see what he's really after in the future. Anyway, thanks for the review again. Hope to see more of your reviews soon! ^^ Bye! :)
8/13/2007 c3 Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu
Heya there! It's me again! XD Anyway, thanks very much for your reviews for Elven Chronicles as of up till now. Anyway, on with the review! Ok, first things first, again, the characters' description here was detailed. Something which I tried, but not sure whether it's really counted as a success. And yeah, the whole intro part reminds me of the part where Gai asked his team to introduce themselves in Naruto. Just something here to state. Basically, I'm rather interested in the characters' past. To join Exert in his cause could mean that these other characters may have their own agenda. I'm not saying that they definitely have some evil motives behind it although whether to do that is entirely up to you. Instead, what I think from here is that these followers definitely has a certain cause to follow since they're willing to become Exert's companions. Which basically boils down to what actually led them to it. Altruism, possible. But what actually led to the altruism or whatever cause these people may have? That's where character development comes. IMO to relate the characters to the reader, reflecting on their past is the best way to do it. In fact, if you want, you can put in a certain selfishness within the characters. Not neccesary the cliched "for my own material gains" type, but rather, you can expand the whole area beyond the boundaries of material wealth or glory. Something that goes along the path of personal morals or justice can be an attraction to the readers. After all, not everyone is Lord Jesus. Anyway, apart from this issue, nothing much constructive to say for now. Anyway, thanks again for your reviews for Elven Chronicles. Hope to see more of them for my other stories soon! ^^ Bye! :)
8/12/2007 c2 Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu
Dude, I thought Gej was the bad guy... but then again, maybe he's really the bad guy... anyway, on this chapter, I do find a vast improvement here. The pace is just right and you really did well in the description part. I try to think up of something constructive, but my brain's not up to the task at the moment... x_x anyway, one thing I can say is that the pace of this story is going just right, unlike that of mine, which is virtually going along the speed of a sloth. _ Anyway, thanks very much for your review just now. Hope to see more of your reviews in the future! ^^ Bye! :)
8/10/2007 c1 9Shang
Well, I finally made it to read your story.

The story seems intriguing and could be interesting. The history of your world is original (though I kinda find it slightly sad that the area this adventure will take place will most likely be small as it's only around eight cities really) and those six guys may turn out to be interesting characters.

I say this story has potencial al I'll keep my eye out for it. I'll read more in the near future.

So far: nice job.
8/9/2007 c1 13Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu
Heya there! Thanks for your review! It really made my day! :) Anyway, here to return the favor... ok, basically, I do find this chapter interesting as in I see quite a bit of interest in your world. Just a few things I want to say here. Firstly, I believe you can do much more in adding more details in the background history compared to the rather brief one here. Another issue is that for some reason, this chapter seems a bit rushed to me. Maybe you can start with what actually happened in the beginning or at least prior to this chapter to let the readers have a clearer idea on what's actually happening and what to expect. Of course these are just suggestions. What you want to do with your story is up to you. That being said though, I hope I don't sound mean in my comments. Anyway, thanks again for your review for Elven Chronicles. Hope to see more of the reviews soon! ^^ Bye! :)
7/25/2007 c2 7Shotokan Master
I really liked the second chapter, it was well written and enjoyable, can't wait to read what happens next!
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