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7/22/2007 c1 5nuttx
Interesting piece.

"Will you come back?" He asked curiously.

...should be written as:

"Will you come back?" he asked curiously.

I also advise using shorter paragraphs, as well as making the comparison between weather and emotion-related raining more abstract.

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