for Vicarious1/17/2009 c1 
2dragonflydreamer
Hm, not my favorite piece of yours.
First, the sentence structure makes this a bit repetative. In a normal poem it would work, but a haiku is so short that it's overbearing.
Also, this is dancing a fine line between original poetry and fanpoetry. I almost want to say it belongs on FFN...almost. Honestly, I'm not rally sure.
Concept's interesting, though. Again, a creative take on fangirlism.
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2dragonflydreamerHm, not my favorite piece of yours.
First, the sentence structure makes this a bit repetative. In a normal poem it would work, but a haiku is so short that it's overbearing.
Also, this is dancing a fine line between original poetry and fanpoetry. I almost want to say it belongs on FFN...almost. Honestly, I'm not rally sure.
Concept's interesting, though. Again, a creative take on fangirlism.
~Brought to you by the Review Marathon (link in profile)
12/25/2007 c1 65Nemonus
Again, as in the one about fangirls, I'm wanting more from this poem. At least more lines, describing how this vacarious living felt, but perhaps more thought, about what vicarious living means to you, about the world Rowling created enfolding you or however it feels, about the consequences. Ooh, it's a haiku. And it's got a bit of the snap on the end that a good haiku has, because the first two lines go together very well. But I'd like it to be longer.
65NemonusAgain, as in the one about fangirls, I'm wanting more from this poem. At least more lines, describing how this vacarious living felt, but perhaps more thought, about what vicarious living means to you, about the world Rowling created enfolding you or however it feels, about the consequences. Ooh, it's a haiku. And it's got a bit of the snap on the end that a good haiku has, because the first two lines go together very well. But I'd like it to be longer.
7/23/2007 c1 174a silenced revolution
Books are a great way to escape and live other lives. Nice haiku.
174a silenced revolutionBooks are a great way to escape and live other lives. Nice haiku.