for To Laugh at Myself12/5/2007 c1 
65Nemonus
lol, I like how the end turns it around. Even the thoughts we think are right now will seem foolish.
I really like "punching thoughts with my fist"
"I feel sillier than one of Santa’s elves" is itself a silly line, and as if you just needed a rhyme...
"The cause of these problems I have all but forgot!/I know better; and I am so happy and free/Because I put it all behind, and in Christ I believe" is quite good; tis the sequence I go through also with problems.
"stupid random/Of love" Eh? I think you're missing a noun.
"fandom"? Doesn't seem to fit.
This poem definitly has potential and I'd like to see a rework of it. Not bad as is either.
65Nemonuslol, I like how the end turns it around. Even the thoughts we think are right now will seem foolish.
I really like "punching thoughts with my fist"
"I feel sillier than one of Santa’s elves" is itself a silly line, and as if you just needed a rhyme...
"The cause of these problems I have all but forgot!/I know better; and I am so happy and free/Because I put it all behind, and in Christ I believe" is quite good; tis the sequence I go through also with problems.
"stupid random/Of love" Eh? I think you're missing a noun.
"fandom"? Doesn't seem to fit.
This poem definitly has potential and I'd like to see a rework of it. Not bad as is either.