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8/27/2010 c1 156Jazzista
Very nice. You give beautiful images but leave just enough mystery to keep the reader delightfully guessing. Nicely written!
10/23/2008 c1 65Nemonus
Very good exploration of a complex, writerly mind. I really like the theme of uncertainties in this-'ambiguous panic', "not letting herself become attached", "she begins to lose track"-that make an otherwise mundane (if very pretty) scene sound complicated and half-imagined. Also nice is the fact that it touches on emotion but does not dwell in sadness ("places and people/she's tried to forget, setting off/slight waves of change" (the "slight" perfects that line)) and that, writerly, she also appreciates and categorizes, realizes how "unfathomable" are the "sensations of loss".

Very nice.
12/15/2007 c1 332smile for the sunshine

well written.

i loved it. : )
7/24/2007 c1 80just dani
just testing something...
7/24/2007 c1 44AuraBorealis
wow. one of the best. i now how she feels,i feel like that sometimes. very deep. this is defintaly a favorite
7/23/2007 c1 2WhenWillLifeEverBeFun
this poem is absolutely beautiful. i love your use of words, it's like i can picture this moment actually happening. brilliant.
7/23/2007 c1 121Wishdreamer89
Lovely words and imagery. A storybook of feelings. And the ending cuts it off nice. And it gets lighter & down-to-earth with the day distortion (On a Monday or perhaps Tuesday) and images of soundless laugher and familar faces. So it's not just a pretty poem. People can put themselves in the place of it. Friends, family, memories, ect. Very nicely done. You obviously know how to write a poem.

Christ surely Blessed' You!


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