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9/15/2007 c1 2Rowvle
Dolly is so mean! Poor Jon :(

this is such a creative story. Dolly's slightly creepy...

~ToXiC~
8/8/2007 c1 18Rose Valentine
Really eerie.
7/29/2007 c1 primrose666
i really liked this story. it's simple but effective. =)
7/27/2007 c1 40Jareth the Monk
I must assume that "Dolly" really is a doll, and that Jon and Jane are either brother and sister, or really close in some other way, and that they're young (maybe pre-teens at most). I like the fact that Dolly eats normal food and is not some bloodthristy cannibal like any Chucky movie you ever saw. Well, maybe Dolly is more bloodthirsty by the end. I didn't catch any grammatical errors and the story moved along swiftly (which I like). I think some poetic justice for Jon would be to have him tied up at the table and Dolly stuffing his face with scones so he can't talk and will die choking and unable to scream or make any noise, like he shouldn't have been doing in the first place. How about a second chapter?

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