for Dreams of Uncertainty, Surrealism of Reality2/16/2009 c50 
1Pterodactyl
It really has been a long time since your last update. Ah well, slow and steady wins the race.
I still love your writing style, and I wish that you would pop out more chapters but I can't write that much, so I won't ask you to.
I have a couple of ideas for Z to create, it would be your choice on using them though.
1: A tracker that is set to Aria, and Aria only.
2: A pocket in space-time that he could put junk in, that he could open at any time, anywhere. He would never have to worry about losing stuff again!
3: Complete intangibility at his mere thought. (AKA walking through walls, some people don't know what it means)
If you don't like them, or just don't want to use them due to an allready writen chapter, it is perfectly fine.
Thank you for writing this, I frequently find myself during school waiting to get home to check on what new chapters there are. As for the late delay of this review, I am a Senior in high school too. With three IB classes.
Anyway... RFYS
Pterodactyl
1PterodactylIt really has been a long time since your last update. Ah well, slow and steady wins the race.
I still love your writing style, and I wish that you would pop out more chapters but I can't write that much, so I won't ask you to.
I have a couple of ideas for Z to create, it would be your choice on using them though.
1: A tracker that is set to Aria, and Aria only.
2: A pocket in space-time that he could put junk in, that he could open at any time, anywhere. He would never have to worry about losing stuff again!
3: Complete intangibility at his mere thought. (AKA walking through walls, some people don't know what it means)
If you don't like them, or just don't want to use them due to an allready writen chapter, it is perfectly fine.
Thank you for writing this, I frequently find myself during school waiting to get home to check on what new chapters there are. As for the late delay of this review, I am a Senior in high school too. With three IB classes.
Anyway... RFYS
Pterodactyl
2/15/2009 c50 7KuroKage1717
The Ancients...yeah, have no idea what they are. :) When this story is complete, I'll have to read it from beginning to end in one go just to get everything, lol. I'm looking forward to the next chapter, though - love his suit of armor!
7KuroKage1717The Ancients...yeah, have no idea what they are. :) When this story is complete, I'll have to read it from beginning to end in one go just to get everything, lol. I'm looking forward to the next chapter, though - love his suit of armor!
1/5/2009 c49 fusionbeam
well no prob with lack of action sometimes ya just need to introduce plot points without clutter so they stand out.
well no prob with lack of action sometimes ya just need to introduce plot points without clutter so they stand out.
1/4/2009 c49 1Pterodactyl
If I get to say that your chapter quality is just as good as before I will. It is true. I just want more, even if it takes five months between chapters, as long as it continues the story I'm fine with it. Well, as long as it doesn't have grammar, spelling, or punctuation errors in it.
This was a good chapter, and even if you don't like your own writing, so be it. I'm still going to read it, just to see how the heck this ends. Or if yuo tell me, how it gets to the end, because, honestly, I haven't a clue where this is going.
Anyway, good luck writing, and I'm procrastinating too. RFYS
Pterodactyl
1PterodactylIf I get to say that your chapter quality is just as good as before I will. It is true. I just want more, even if it takes five months between chapters, as long as it continues the story I'm fine with it. Well, as long as it doesn't have grammar, spelling, or punctuation errors in it.
This was a good chapter, and even if you don't like your own writing, so be it. I'm still going to read it, just to see how the heck this ends. Or if yuo tell me, how it gets to the end, because, honestly, I haven't a clue where this is going.
Anyway, good luck writing, and I'm procrastinating too. RFYS
Pterodactyl
1/4/2009 c49 7KuroKage1717
Good look with the next semester in college! I'm also going to college too, which I will be very happy when it's over, lol!
It might've been just me, but for some reason, this chapter didn't seem to flow together as well as it should. I can't really tell why, but in any case, I enjoyed it. I love Z's HALO, too. :D
7KuroKage1717Good look with the next semester in college! I'm also going to college too, which I will be very happy when it's over, lol!
It might've been just me, but for some reason, this chapter didn't seem to flow together as well as it should. I can't really tell why, but in any case, I enjoyed it. I love Z's HALO, too. :D
11/23/2008 c48 onceuponastarrr
Wow. That was really long.
A interesting twist that's one heck of a cliffhanger, and a really unexpected explanation of Sumire's.. recovery?
It does make me wonder how far the Agency's reach is.. and if it's only concerned about Evening Star – or if it is merely 'never betray'. Forgive me if that's already been covered earlier; I've been slightly overloaded by the sheer length of your chapters..
Wow. That was really long.
A interesting twist that's one heck of a cliffhanger, and a really unexpected explanation of Sumire's.. recovery?
It does make me wonder how far the Agency's reach is.. and if it's only concerned about Evening Star – or if it is merely 'never betray'. Forgive me if that's already been covered earlier; I've been slightly overloaded by the sheer length of your chapters..
11/21/2008 c48 KuroKage1717
I totally loved this chapter - I could see the battlefield inside my head as I read along. Yes, I am growing rather curious about Sumire, but I'm sure all my questions will be answered in later chapters.
As for Z - I find myself liking him more and more. It's amazing how much stronger he's grown. I really appreciate the way you have him use his power creatively. You could always just have him create a nuke bomb, destroy everything, and have that be the end of each battle. But you don't, and it makes things all the better for it. (Though I guess that would be cool near the end of the story. :D)
~Kurokage
I totally loved this chapter - I could see the battlefield inside my head as I read along. Yes, I am growing rather curious about Sumire, but I'm sure all my questions will be answered in later chapters.
As for Z - I find myself liking him more and more. It's amazing how much stronger he's grown. I really appreciate the way you have him use his power creatively. You could always just have him create a nuke bomb, destroy everything, and have that be the end of each battle. But you don't, and it makes things all the better for it. (Though I guess that would be cool near the end of the story. :D)
~Kurokage
11/13/2008 c47 KuroKage1717
no way. . .totally never ever thought that'd happen in the very end? how? ah, i guess i shall find out in the next chapter. Anyways, i rather enjoyed the first half. it was weird, creepy, and awesome! so, how many more surprises do you have stuck up your sleeve?
no way. . .totally never ever thought that'd happen in the very end? how? ah, i guess i shall find out in the next chapter. Anyways, i rather enjoyed the first half. it was weird, creepy, and awesome! so, how many more surprises do you have stuck up your sleeve?
11/7/2008 c47 fusionbeam
good chapter and not complaining about her coming back but how do you reconcile aria getting sumires memories if sumire is alive?
good chapter and not complaining about her coming back but how do you reconcile aria getting sumires memories if sumire is alive?
11/4/2008 c47 1Pterodactyl
Wow. Hey you did fine on the sins. Just how and why did you manage to bring back Sumire?
Any way, thanks for answering my questions. And in the way that you did it, thank you.
That chapter added great ammounts of depth to Z. Just, what is his real name on earth?
Anyway, please keep writing. Good luck on your midterms, and revel in the possible lack of homework after them.
RFYS
Pterodactyl
1PterodactylWow. Hey you did fine on the sins. Just how and why did you manage to bring back Sumire?
Any way, thanks for answering my questions. And in the way that you did it, thank you.
That chapter added great ammounts of depth to Z. Just, what is his real name on earth?
Anyway, please keep writing. Good luck on your midterms, and revel in the possible lack of homework after them.
RFYS
Pterodactyl
10/27/2008 c46 7KuroKage1717
just three words: what the HECK?
that's a very cruel cliffhanger, you know. :P
7KuroKage1717just three words: what the HECK?
that's a very cruel cliffhanger, you know. :P