2/5/2012 c8 4AboutAs SubtleAs A FlyingBrick
I don't feel you've made Brooke a nerd because she seems a bit too 'average' sometimes in stories you need to exaggerate a character to make them fun and I don't see any geekiness in brooke or her friends, maybe a rfrence to avatar or anime but that's not really defining them. It's not too cliche either since in most stories based on love its mostly opposite attract, Ian and Brooke are very compatible. It would be way more exciting if Brooke went for one of the bad boy triplets. I do like your story but I really wish you would add depth and perspective to a person like we don't even know Brooke's hair colour or eyes colour, I'm fact we don't know anything about the characters in detail. I haven't read all the story but I think the fact that you didn't mention thes descriptions at the start of the story a bit of a downer. Please get a Neta because they help you soo much, they give you feedback from a readers perspective AND help you with editing the story. Please don't take this as a negative feedback, I just have expirience from my own stories . Keep up the writting !
Ps, watch out with your spelling, before you upload the document from your Microsoft word or whatever do autocorrect, and then proof read it.
See ya! X
I don't feel you've made Brooke a nerd because she seems a bit too 'average' sometimes in stories you need to exaggerate a character to make them fun and I don't see any geekiness in brooke or her friends, maybe a rfrence to avatar or anime but that's not really defining them. It's not too cliche either since in most stories based on love its mostly opposite attract, Ian and Brooke are very compatible. It would be way more exciting if Brooke went for one of the bad boy triplets. I do like your story but I really wish you would add depth and perspective to a person like we don't even know Brooke's hair colour or eyes colour, I'm fact we don't know anything about the characters in detail. I haven't read all the story but I think the fact that you didn't mention thes descriptions at the start of the story a bit of a downer. Please get a Neta because they help you soo much, they give you feedback from a readers perspective AND help you with editing the story. Please don't take this as a negative feedback, I just have expirience from my own stories . Keep up the writting !
Ps, watch out with your spelling, before you upload the document from your Microsoft word or whatever do autocorrect, and then proof read it.
See ya! X
12/18/2011 c9 2Dreams-of-Fairies
Awesomesauce
Pure awesomesauce!
I can't for your next update!
This is a really nice piece of work xDD
And I love Rachel
Awesomesauce
Pure awesomesauce!
I can't for your next update!
This is a really nice piece of work xDD
And I love Rachel
11/8/2011 c9 Milu
This story is awesome! You have to keep on writing, seriously, I can't wait for the next chapter! :)
This story is awesome! You have to keep on writing, seriously, I can't wait for the next chapter! :)
12/16/2010 c9 anonymous
please update! this is rlly good :)
please update! this is rlly good :)
5/16/2009 c8 2Replace Bulb
This story is great. It's annoying how you only have 15 reviews; it totally doesn't do you justice. I hope you continue updating
:)
This story is great. It's annoying how you only have 15 reviews; it totally doesn't do you justice. I hope you continue updating
:)
4/24/2009 c8 Oyoa
Yay! Man,I've been so busy that it took me a while to catch up!~
But I am sure glad I did! Whoot Rachel! Work it! ;p
I am so excited to see how this turns out. I hope they don't hurt Ian, because he seems nice. I'm suspicious of next door boy though. He seems too good... I hope he's not a jerk like the other brothers. (I forgot their name, I'm sorry... *looks* Owen and Evan... got it. XD)
Will be excited for next chapter!
Yay! Man,I've been so busy that it took me a while to catch up!~
But I am sure glad I did! Whoot Rachel! Work it! ;p
I am so excited to see how this turns out. I hope they don't hurt Ian, because he seems nice. I'm suspicious of next door boy though. He seems too good... I hope he's not a jerk like the other brothers. (I forgot their name, I'm sorry... *looks* Owen and Evan... got it. XD)
Will be excited for next chapter!
4/21/2009 c8 32justagirlx3
lurv ur story!
keep it up!
p.s. im one of those ppl who will review the day u post something new- everytime so u r warned
xoxo :)
lurv ur story!
keep it up!
p.s. im one of those ppl who will review the day u post something new- everytime so u r warned
xoxo :)