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8/1/2007 c1 97rust phoenix
I agree with what you are saying, well expressed. You're consistant with the rhyming, but it makes the poem sound less mature sometimes. That's not necessarily a bad thing, maybe you were going for a lighter read that still makes the reader think (I smiled at the "thinking sorter") line). I just thought I'd point it out.

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