for Time to Die Dear4/24/2009 c1 
173Little girl Big world
Wow good job! There is a lot of raw energy and anger in this, you can feel it in the words.
"slit throat disaster
drunk pills laughter
broken heart shatter"
These lines stood out to me. I liked them and the whole thing as a piece.
173Little girl Big worldWow good job! There is a lot of raw energy and anger in this, you can feel it in the words.
"slit throat disaster
drunk pills laughter
broken heart shatter"
These lines stood out to me. I liked them and the whole thing as a piece.
1/18/2008 c1 katt's got your tongue
THIS IS AWESOME.
YOU AS A WRITER IS AWESOME.
your rhymes are contagious and the message is clear. loveitloveitloveit
+faves!
THIS IS AWESOME.
YOU AS A WRITER IS AWESOME.
your rhymes are contagious and the message is clear. loveitloveitloveit
+faves!
9/2/2007 c1 72Definition
You've stripped anger down to the core. This is so hardcore, so raw and brutal.
The repetition is excellent. It really emphasizes your point and feeling. Nice!
72DefinitionYou've stripped anger down to the core. This is so hardcore, so raw and brutal.
The repetition is excellent. It really emphasizes your point and feeling. Nice!
8/19/2007 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
I love the raw anger in this - Really, I loved that you got this angry, it was like your thoughts were just flying from your head, to your mouth, to the page, it was thrilling. Wonderful work. Real, and emotional (the best kind of poetry.) Keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet.
1k+Faithless JulietI love the raw anger in this - Really, I loved that you got this angry, it was like your thoughts were just flying from your head, to your mouth, to the page, it was thrilling. Wonderful work. Real, and emotional (the best kind of poetry.) Keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet.
8/5/2007 c1 49Toxic.Industrial.Waste
Oh this one made me smile. Vengeful, hateful, with a lighter sarcastic side. I had a horrible day and this is just what I needed.
~Ericaskyy
49Toxic.Industrial.WasteOh this one made me smile. Vengeful, hateful, with a lighter sarcastic side. I had a horrible day and this is just what I needed.
~Ericaskyy