8/5/2007 c1 95Christy Leigh Stewart
This was sweet, very simple and nice. I hadn't ever read a story with a laundry theme before either~
This was sweet, very simple and nice. I hadn't ever read a story with a laundry theme before either~
8/5/2007 c1 6concerto49
Bold the title perhaps?
Could do with a touch of dialogue.
Some good imagery.
Need more on thoughts/feelings/emotions of persona.
Some of the sentences need more work on, but generally okay.
Anyhow. Cheers.
Bold the title perhaps?
Could do with a touch of dialogue.
Some good imagery.
Need more on thoughts/feelings/emotions of persona.
Some of the sentences need more work on, but generally okay.
Anyhow. Cheers.