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8/30/2007 c1 15Lauren Wolfe
The modifiers are pretty romantic; very nice ^_^ I don't understand, though...is it merely your aim to describe her? Because if this is so, I think that it's not enough...I think that you chould explain the Song of the Undine a bit more. It just seems like a description, that's all...

...but maybe that's exactly what your gunning for. Hehe...

Anywho, rock on! :)
8/15/2007 c1 Benjamin - To Be Deleted
Brush her hair and clean her up... then introduce me to her!

No, but seriously, you have this thing with really vivid imagery. I love it cuz I can see what you're describing to me everytime.

I give you 2 more taco points. Only 88 to go til you get that taco. Yummy!
8/10/2007 c1 4Vampyre of the Varg
I liked the imagery, a beautiful picture came to mind. However, the flow bothered me. *Tip* try using "Which" or "Where" instead of "that" sometimes it helps with the flow (sorry if this is the second review I've posted, compture prob). Imagery id definately your strong point.
8/10/2007 c1 332smile for the sunshine
Pretty. I liked the description here too. I believe that is your strength. Keep writing. =]

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