for but you're talking about driving plans6/22/2008 c1 
27hide your eyes
this is beautiful. i love repeating the first line later on. i really like that, i don't know why.
27hide your eyesthis is beautiful. i love repeating the first line later on. i really like that, i don't know why.
1/29/2008 c1 102Midnight In Eden
Structure. This piece is craving it. Line breaks, more stanzas and a better flow would help the read and aesthetic of the entire poem. It's not that it's bad, it just needs to be "cleaner". Some of the personal touches are very good but you also can easily clear out a lot of little words i.e. "just" on L1 S2.
Otherwise I really like this, it just needs some organization.
Midnight
102Midnight In EdenStructure. This piece is craving it. Line breaks, more stanzas and a better flow would help the read and aesthetic of the entire poem. It's not that it's bad, it just needs to be "cleaner". Some of the personal touches are very good but you also can easily clear out a lot of little words i.e. "just" on L1 S2.
Otherwise I really like this, it just needs some organization.
Midnight
8/27/2007 c1 65Stella Grimshaw
"So I can’t rant about my lack of love life or my new makeup."
That was by far my favorite line.
65Stella Grimshaw"So I can’t rant about my lack of love life or my new makeup."
That was by far my favorite line.
8/26/2007 c1 22Goodnight Nickname
That 3. I'm not sure why, but it kind of says something about the poem for me. 3 words in "I love you"? I don't know. But this is truly magnificent. I love EVERYTHING about it. I have no choice but to add this to my favorites. If I don't I truly will have failed as a poet.
22Goodnight NicknameThat 3. I'm not sure why, but it kind of says something about the poem for me. 3 words in "I love you"? I don't know. But this is truly magnificent. I love EVERYTHING about it. I have no choice but to add this to my favorites. If I don't I truly will have failed as a poet.
8/19/2007 c1 Joy Caffrey
I just had to read it. You love deeply. pen to paper is your healing balm. thanks for speaking what is in our hearts.
I just had to read it. You love deeply. pen to paper is your healing balm. thanks for speaking what is in our hearts.