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9/8/2007 c1 871no.peace.los.angeles
God, that was beautiful. So ethereal. I don't know what else to say. The imagery is just fantastic. Beautiful. Keep writing! :)
9/7/2007 c1 879Moondog Dozier
This has some marvelous sound and imagery interspersed. Lines like, "and those fake eyelash-snowflakes", really exemplifies the mixture of an abstract reality with a concrete portrait so effectively. I like how this is a sound explosion that takes the reader out of their established thought patterns, and into a surreality that wakes up the senses to another world of sound. Marvelous, Marvelous sound. Great write. MD:77.
8/26/2007 c1 hey maria
"and climb frozen raindrops/back home to the moon." That's a pretty image.

I like the whole weather theme here.

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