for Armageddon9/18/2007 c1 
38CarpeDiem28
lol. i really like the message the poem sends. and the repition was a great idea because it gives the poem a little something. great work! keep writing!
38CarpeDiem28lol. i really like the message the poem sends. and the repition was a great idea because it gives the poem a little something. great work! keep writing!
8/27/2007 c1 jojoba-music-girl
I have one thing to say, besides that I liked this piece, and that is: in the sentence 'I loved you more then misery', shouldn't it be 'than' instead of 'then'? Or am I getting this all wrong? I liked it, but I think you wrote better pieces than this one. Keep on writing!
I have one thing to say, besides that I liked this piece, and that is: in the sentence 'I loved you more then misery', shouldn't it be 'than' instead of 'then'? Or am I getting this all wrong? I liked it, but I think you wrote better pieces than this one. Keep on writing!
8/27/2007 c1 38R. Douglas
It's an intresting piece but the lines doing really mesh well, the syllables of some lines are too long or too short to match the previous verse. It'd be nice to see you expand it a little more, maybe add a break from the Verse, pre-chorus, chorus, etc.
If you have time would you please review something by me? Thanks a lot.
38R. DouglasIt's an intresting piece but the lines doing really mesh well, the syllables of some lines are too long or too short to match the previous verse. It'd be nice to see you expand it a little more, maybe add a break from the Verse, pre-chorus, chorus, etc.
If you have time would you please review something by me? Thanks a lot.