for held high1/31/2008 c1 
332smile for the sunshine
that's pretty and sweet and yet shows inner struggles. don't we all feel somewhat reserved at first but then sometimes, i think we drop our guard too soon and it just becomes a mess in the end because you finally stopped stressing and let yourself believe that maybe forever was possible.
but usually that's unlikely.
best wishes for you. = )
332smile for the sunshinethat's pretty and sweet and yet shows inner struggles. don't we all feel somewhat reserved at first but then sometimes, i think we drop our guard too soon and it just becomes a mess in the end because you finally stopped stressing and let yourself believe that maybe forever was possible.
but usually that's unlikely.
best wishes for you. = )
12/2/2007 c1 34Kneeling Glory
Your last stanza could use a little work. It's got a great message, but you're TELLING it to us. In the rest of the poem, you're SHOWING us. And seeing, my dear, is believing.
Still, an excellent write. I'm enjoying reading your poetry. I experimented a little with formatting like you use, but it never worked for me like it works for you. :P
34Kneeling GloryYour last stanza could use a little work. It's got a great message, but you're TELLING it to us. In the rest of the poem, you're SHOWING us. And seeing, my dear, is believing.
Still, an excellent write. I'm enjoying reading your poetry. I experimented a little with formatting like you use, but it never worked for me like it works for you. :P
10/4/2007 c1 233kelsi bones
this is amazing! i'm sure you know how i love the use of spaces, italics, bolded font and other such things in poetry by now =]. brilltiant work, especially the third line
(that makes me feel like this could be happily ever after)
very bueatiful imagery. maybe it's just me, but it makes me think of two people running off into the sunset together, but in a non-cheesy way, haha.
k.X
233kelsi bonesthis is amazing! i'm sure you know how i love the use of spaces, italics, bolded font and other such things in poetry by now =]. brilltiant work, especially the third line
(that makes me feel like this could be happily ever after)
very bueatiful imagery. maybe it's just me, but it makes me think of two people running off into the sunset together, but in a non-cheesy way, haha.
k.X
9/16/2007 c1 140Pesadilla Mortal
This was uber good :] I love the way the words played out to give this even more of a sense of reality.
Keep up the good work!
♥P.M.
140Pesadilla MortalThis was uber good :] I love the way the words played out to give this even more of a sense of reality.
Keep up the good work!
♥P.M.
9/13/2007 c1 she smolders
Loving the imagery in the first verse and the deliberate break in the word "farther". Take care.
Loving the imagery in the first verse and the deliberate break in the word "farther". Take care.