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9/2/2007 c1 37PineTheFae
This is a very dreamy poem, I loved how it flowed. It's sad, but beautiful way of telling a love story in a sense. This has become my favorite of yours. ^-^
9/1/2007 c1 65Nemonus
Nice! The metaphor carries throughout well and "Or is the life of wings on high/...one more beautiful and one more free/than that of a creature born beneath the sea?" brings up an interesting point I wouldn't've thought to get from it. The "child's" "dream" of love from another "medium" made impossible by such (metaphorical) things as oxygen and gravity is a poignant illustration.
9/1/2007 c1 59Tranquil Thorns
I really like how you started out with your poem! I think it gives it a dreamy sort of fluency. (:

Very pretty wording, too. I love the descriptions of birds and fish, and the questions you ask throughout the poem. Once again, a very dreamy quality to it.

Very calming, lulling words. It makes me want to fly with the birds or swim with the fish. Or both.

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