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7/29/2009 c1 1BreeBelle
Aw. How heart wrenching! I think I felt my eyes getting wet... this was really very good. One thing I would suggest revising is their meeting. It seems kind of...plastic. I'm not trying to berate you; this is just a suggestion. And if you wanted to, (probably not, considering it's a one-shot, lol) you could totally make this into a story. Something about the flashbacks is juicy, like story material. The song is so sad... I never really liked James Blunt with the whole creepy stalker-like "You're Beautiful" thing, but this song really touches a part of the person who's listening to it. Awesome one-shot, keep up the good work! :)
9/16/2007 c1 jojoba-music-girl
This is so sad... But it's so well written, I love the song by James Blunt too, it has always been one of my favorites. It's great how you've put that song through your story. Great one!

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