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3/9/2008 c1 123454321
'was to fat in her mind'- Incorrect 'to'; it should be 'too'.

Other than that, I think this is a very well written piece. I feel it could be expanded upon and still retain the urgency in it, if you were so inclined.

-J.A.

Courtesy of the review marathon (link on profile).
10/28/2007 c1 72itsonlyme07
wow..that was really sad and yet so true for so many out there..the saddess part was when you mentioned the friends that thought they were overweight..they are only 103 :(..I have a friend who is struggling with this and who has been for about 3 years now...it is so hard to watch...this poem is beautiful! thanks for sharing it! good job!
9/18/2007 c1 54Artemis Anderson
Wow...wonderful work on such a sad situation.
9/18/2007 c1 144Infinite Smiles
Beautiful and so sad... I wish that this wasn't true for so many young girls out there!

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