for On the trail9/21/2007 c1 
42Wyngz
I like it. I like how you chose a universal topic, something everyone can identify with. Point in case, I myself like to go on walks. Weird. Good job, the rhyme scheme is good except in one part...where is it...oh "The fresh gentle breeze clears my mind, hence the peace I seek I am able to find."
The wording is nice (I like the first line alot) but the last sentence threw off my concentration because it's a little awkward. It doesn't flow...if you'd used I'm instead of I am, I think that would have been better, but that's just my opinion. It's your poem. If you like it there, keep it. ^-^
42WyngzI like it. I like how you chose a universal topic, something everyone can identify with. Point in case, I myself like to go on walks. Weird. Good job, the rhyme scheme is good except in one part...where is it...oh "The fresh gentle breeze clears my mind, hence the peace I seek I am able to find."
The wording is nice (I like the first line alot) but the last sentence threw off my concentration because it's a little awkward. It doesn't flow...if you'd used I'm instead of I am, I think that would have been better, but that's just my opinion. It's your poem. If you like it there, keep it. ^-^