for Illusion, Divination and Flame9/23/2007 c1 
20Talen Spira
Hey, this isn't a bad start... i can't wait to see what her motivation was for going to the fair. I also found it a little hard to keep track of all the characters... you had them popping in and out fairly quickly, which could be something you look at in the future.
20Talen SpiraHey, this isn't a bad start... i can't wait to see what her motivation was for going to the fair. I also found it a little hard to keep track of all the characters... you had them popping in and out fairly quickly, which could be something you look at in the future.