for UnOver1/7/2009 c1 
1we make fire electric blue
God, that's adorable! And SO true! My God how true it is.
The title is apt and cute.
Me likey.
1we make fire electric blueGod, that's adorable! And SO true! My God how true it is.
The title is apt and cute.
Me likey.
9/24/2007 c1 51instant bliss
This is great. I love your expression "UnOver"... though I like it best the way you wrote it in the title, as if it goes together naturally in your head, rather than your having to pont out how it's been constructed as in "un-over". And I like your imagery - how it comes in short lines, in flashes. It gives the whole poem a fragmented, confused, and slightly desperate edge. Great!
51instant blissThis is great. I love your expression "UnOver"... though I like it best the way you wrote it in the title, as if it goes together naturally in your head, rather than your having to pont out how it's been constructed as in "un-over". And I like your imagery - how it comes in short lines, in flashes. It gives the whole poem a fragmented, confused, and slightly desperate edge. Great!